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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person culture and character from their choice of clothes. do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 1
A few people believe that it is possible to predict a lot about an individual perception and personality from their style of clothing. I don't agree with this point, because we cannot tell about the personality of the individual and people even if they wear extravagant outfit, it doesn’t mean that they are superb and amiable. First of all, there is a famous quote which says: "Appearances are meant to be deceiving". Despite the appearance, we can't tell in advance what type of man is it. It's hard to make a conclusion without observing the individual, nevertheless, there is a belief that if an individual is wearing neatly and the clothes which he or she wear are spotless, it means that this guy is dapper and has a strong character. Secondly, in my point of view, we had better make a relationship with this individual during a long period of time, which can help us to know more about the personalities and the perception of this individual. For instance, one day I have met a somebody while I was travelling in a foreign country, then became friends and made relationship. At first, I accept this individual as incorrect and awful guy, because at that time he was wearing awkward clothes and they all were old-fashioned. As a result, through a long period of relationship, I understood that he is an awesome individual with superb nature, due to lack of money he had to wear his old clothes, and if he had not done so, he could not make progress in his life. In conclusion, If I had to say about temperament of an individual, I would probably say that we must get to know this individual better at first. Because in my point of view, "appearances are meant to be deceiving".
A few
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believe that it is possible to predict a lot about an
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perception and personality from their style of clothing. I don't
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with this point,
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we cannot
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tell
about the personality of the
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and
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even if they wear extravagant outfit, it doesn’t mean that they are superb and amiable.

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First of all
, there is a
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quote which says:
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Appearances
are meant
to be deceiving
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. Despite the appearance, we can't
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tell
in advance what type of
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is it. It's
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hard
to
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make
a conclusion without observing the
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individual
,
nevertheless
, there is a belief that if an
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individual
is wearing
neatly
and the clothes which he or she
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wear
are spotless, it means that this guy is dapper and has a strong character.

Secondly
, in my point of view, we had better
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make
a relationship with this
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individual
during a long period of time, which can
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help
us to know more about the personalities and the perception of this
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individual
.
For instance
, one day I have met a somebody while I was travelling in a foreign country, then became friends and made relationship. At
first
, I accept this
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individual
as incorrect and awful guy,
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because
at that time he was wearing awkward
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clothes and
they all were
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old
-fashioned.
As a result
, through a long period of relationship, I understood that he is an awesome
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individual
with superb nature, due to lack of money he had to wear his
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old
clothes, and if he had not done
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so
, he could not
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make
progress in his life.

In conclusion
, If I had to say about temperament of an
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individual
, I would
probably
say that we
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must
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get
to know this
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individual
better at
first
.
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Because
in my point of view,
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appearances
are meant
to be deceiving
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.
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 1

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7.5
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