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Nowadays there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society To what extent do you agree or disagree v.5

Nowadays there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society v. 5
The internet has affected in order to ease our life to beginning its common using. However, we face its negative, and positive sides. I will briefly explain both viewpoints, supporting by overweight its advantages. It is clear that the internet has changed sharply when it appeared in daily life. Everywhere, every time is connectable due to it. For instance, online shopping, online courses is making a huge benefit to individuals. Not only them, also face to face communication via some application is an incredible happiness for the people who live far from away each other. That is to say, knowledge and intelligence age has started with fast Wi-Fi. To learn anything, to talk anyone who even live other continent of the world is so available, so quickly on the internet. In my perspective, its advantages overweight compared to the drawbacks. On the other hand, society can define as a consuming community in this age. To share everything in the social media, to buy online shopping, upscale brands have influenced in a bad way, doubtless. For example, spending more time on the internet makes sleep problems, according to a survey which completed in a local university. Even it is accurate, overuse anything has bad sides of the people. This is because, the internet should be used consciously, particularly the youth can be controlled by parents. However, admittedly, its positive effects on our life is numerous. In conclusion, I restate that the internet ease to shopping, education, communication, and other sides. In my opinion, however it has a negative influence, using consciously inhibit them. In summary, to deliver fast anything via the internet, is like a dream which have done in reality.
The internet has
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affected
in order to
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ease
our life to beginning its common using.
However
, we face its
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negative
, and
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positive
sides. I will
briefly
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explain
both viewpoints, supporting by overweight its advantages.

It is
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clear
that the internet has
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changed
sharply
when it appeared in daily life. Everywhere, every time is connectable due to it.
For instance
, online shopping, online courses is making a huge benefit to individuals. Not
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only
them,
also
face to face communication via
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some
application is an incredible happiness for the
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people
who
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live
far from away each
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other
.
That is
to say, knowledge and intelligence age has
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started
with
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fast
Wi-Fi. To learn anything, to talk anyone who even
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live
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other
continent of the world is
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so
available,
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so
quickly
on the internet. In my perspective, its advantages overweight compared to the drawbacks.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, society can define as a consuming community in this age. To share everything in the social media, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
online shopping, upscale brands have influenced in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
way, doubtless.
For example
, spending more time on the internet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
sleep problems, according to a survey which completed in a local university. Even it is accurate, overuse anything has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
sides of the
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people
. This is
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because
, the internet should be
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used
consciously
,
particularly
the youth can
be controlled
by parents.
However
,
admittedly
, its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effects on our life is numerous.

In conclusion
, I restate that the internet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
to shopping, education, communication, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
sides. In my opinion,
however
it has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
influence, using
consciously
inhibit them.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
summary, to deliver
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fast
anything via the internet, is like a dream which have done in reality.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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