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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. v. 6
The potential for the global media to shape the current hot topic into an unexpected form and spread the views across the countries to some extent may be positive or negative. In this essay, we will look at both points are, to some degree, justified. To begin with, the global media undoubtedly enriches the people's understanding of contemporary news. This is because the media provide a clear summary of the hype surrounding news and other international issues. For example, a study by Indian sociologists found that the media have heavily influenced the youth's knowledge of current social trending news. It is therefore clear that the media can be essentially needed for the society otherwise the issues, ranging from political to others can be overlooked. On the other hand, many critics argue that people are negatively affected by the media's focus on wars and civil unrest. This is because of exposure to violence that leads to depression. For instance, recent surveys have discovered that depressed people usually cite the darkness of the world as the source of their depression. Since mental health is an important objective of society, therefore it is questionable whether they are populating news to people contains any hidden views. In conclusion, it should be clear that there are for and against the media in the community or also a common man. Thus, a society or an individual can own hands to take the positive aspects of the news at the maximum level and the negative aspects at the minimum level.
The potential for the global
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media
to shape the
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current
hot topic into an unexpected form and spread the views across the countries to
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some
extent may be
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positive
or
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negative
. In this essay, we will look at both points are, to
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some
degree, justified.

To
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begin
with, the global
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undoubtedly
enriches the
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people
's understanding of contemporary
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news
. This is
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because
the
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media
provide a
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clear
summary of the hype surrounding
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news
and other international issues.
For example
, a study by Indian sociologists found that the
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media
have
heavily
influenced the youth's knowledge of
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current
social trending
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news
. It is
therefore
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clear
that the
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media
can be
essentially
needed for the society
otherwise
the issues, ranging from political to others can
be overlooked
.

On the other hand
,
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many
critics argue that
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people
are
negatively
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affected
by the media's focus on wars and civil unrest. This is
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because
of exposure to violence that leads to depression.
For instance
, recent surveys have discovered that depressed
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people
usually
cite the darkness of the world as the source of their depression. Since mental health is an
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important
objective of society,
therefore
it is questionable whether they are populating
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news
to
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people
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contains
any hidden views.

In conclusion
, it should be
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clear
that there are for and against the
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media
in the community or
also
a common
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man
.
Thus
, a society or an individual can
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own
hands to take the
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positive
aspects of the
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news
at the maximum level and the
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negative
aspects at the minimum level.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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