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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what was has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what was has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 3
Thesedays, interaction among people has supressed due to the development of technology. Relationship with gadgets is now more important than any other kind of relationship among people. According to my view, technology has both pros and cons. In this essay I will support my opinion with reasons. Firstly, technology is a boon for each and every sector as it is dominating all fields for example, education, medical, services, and so on. Without these advanced gadgets one cannot match the speed of new developments. Dor instance, earlier mobile phones were not common but now a cell phone serves not only communication purpose but also it acts as a mini-portable computer. Technology is a need of an hour as robots are developed that help the humans on completing their tasks before time and even the type of work that requires a lot of care and attention. However, there are always some disadvantages of everything along with advantages. The biggest constraint of technology is, it is moving people away from each other in other words people are spending most of their time with these instruments instead of having quality time with families or friends. All this causes the weakening of bond of love among family members. Generally, children like to spend their time on technological appliances by playing video games, watching shows, surfing on internet, using social sites and so on. Not only young generation but also elsers have now became a techno slave. In conclusion, it’s a saying that excess of everything is bad so same implies to technology. Though it has make the life easier but due to its excessive usage people are going away from their emotions toward others.
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technology
. Relationship with gadgets is
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important
than any
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other
kind of relationship among
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people
. According to my view,
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technology
has both pros and cons. In this essay I will support my opinion with reasons.

Firstly
,
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technology
is a boon for each and every sector as it is dominating all fields
for example
, education, medical, services, and
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on. Without these advanced gadgets one cannot match the speed of new developments.
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now
a cell phone serves not
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communication purpose
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but
also
it acts as a mini-portable computer.
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Technology
is a need of an hour as robots
are developed
that
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help
the humans on completing their tasks
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before
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time
and even the type of work that requires
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a lot of
care and attention.

However
, there are always
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disadvantages of everything along with advantages. The biggest constraint of
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technology
is, it is moving
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people
away from each
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other
in
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other
words
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people
are spending most of their
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time
with these instruments
instead
of having quality
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time
with families or friends. All this causes the weakening of bond of
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love
among family members.
Generally
, children like to spend their
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time
on technological appliances by playing video games, watching
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shows
, surfing on internet, using social sites and
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so
on. Not
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only
young generation
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also
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have
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became
a techno slave.

In conclusion
, it’s a saying that excess of everything is
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bad
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so
same implies to
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technology
. Though it has
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make
the life easier
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but
due to its excessive usage
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people
are going away from their emotions toward others.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what was has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
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