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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.6

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? 6
In recent years, science and technology have made a huge progress. Therefore, people have adopted different ways to communicate with each other, which has drastically changed the nature of the relationship between them. This development has its own pros and cons. In my opinion, these developments have their own benefits. Certainly, the technology has changed the face of communication that is a key to have a strong relation. Because in the past, it took months to communicate with a person, who is living in the other part of the world. But, the invention of mobile phones has made it possible to communicate with any person at any time. For example, a person, who is working in another city or country can have a video call with his family, which ultimately stronger his relation with them. Furthermore, strangers become friends and friends are getting closer to each other every day. After the invention of social networking websites and mobile applications, everyone is able to contact with anyone. Also, the friends can get the notification of incoming birthdays of their love ones, even it allows to wish them online. Moreover, it has taken the relationship between teachers and students to another level. For example, teachers can taught their students by using online class setup, such as YouTube live or Khan online academy. On the other hand, technology also has some negative effects. For example, before such rapid ways of communication, people loved to visit the park in the evening. They share their problems and happy moments with their friend. But later on, this thing has completely vanished from our lives and unwillingly, a term “online friends” appeared. In conclusion, technology has its own effects on relationship, but its benefits are much more than those, so from prospective technology has plays a vital and significant role to strengthen the relationship.
In recent years, science and
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technology
have made
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a huge progress
.
Therefore
,
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people
have adopted
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different
ways to communicate with each
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other
, which has
drastically
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changed
the nature of the
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relationship
between them. This development has its
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own
pros and cons. In my opinion, these developments have their
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own
benefits.

Certainly
, the
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technology
has
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changed
the face of communication
that is
a key to have a strong relation.
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Because
in the past, it took months to communicate with a person, who is living in the
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other
part of the world.
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But
, the invention of mobile phones has made it possible to communicate with any person at any time.
For example
, a person, who is working in another city or country can have a video call with his family, which
ultimately
stronger his relation with them.

Furthermore
, strangers become
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friends
and
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friends
are getting closer to each
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other
every day. After the invention of social networking websites and mobile applications, everyone is able to contact with anyone.
Also
, the
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friends
can
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get
the notification of incoming birthdays of their
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love ones
, even it
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allows
to wish them
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online
.
Moreover
, it has taken the
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relationship
between teachers and students to another level.
For example
, teachers can taught their students by using
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online
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class
setup, such as YouTube
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live
or Khan
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online
academy.

On the
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other
hand,
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technology
also
has
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some
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negative
effects.
For example
,
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before
such rapid ways of communication,
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people
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loved
to visit the park in the evening. They share their problems and happy moments with their
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friend
.
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But
later on, this thing has completely vanished from our
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lives
and
unwillingly
, a term
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“online
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friends”
appeared.

In conclusion
,
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technology
has its
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own
effects on
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relationship
,
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but
its benefits are much more than those,
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so
from prospective
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technology
has plays a vital and significant role to strengthen the
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relationship
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? 6

Essay
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5 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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