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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people mke? Has this become a positive or negative development? v.10

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people mke? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 10
These days technology takes an important place in our daily life. Indeed, people interact together through their mobile phone. Thus, the new generation, particularly become unsociable. In my opinion, this is a negative development in certain ways. People prefer to send messages instead of talking face to face. When, they need an information or just have some news of their family or friends. They prefer to send them a message on social network. For example, the professor Testart from the CNRS wrote an article where he explains that even if they live under the same roof. They prefer to send message than knocking at the door. I believe that in a few years people will only interact with each other through their cutting-edge devices. Moreover, people prefer to use application to make new relationships. A few years ago, people met their friends in bars and a party, whereas nowadays they prefer to chat online thanks to dating site. So, everything is doing virtually and in some case, they do not even know the person they are talking to. For instance, they prefer to encounter a person only after the software proved that they have the same affinity. Therefore, I am sure that people have more difficulty to talk with others when they are with a group of friends. In conclusion, since a few years technology has changed our way to communicate with each other. This affect, a lot our relationships. For this reasons, people prefer to interact together through social media and make new friends thanks to dating applications.
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technology takes an
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people
interact together through their mobile phone.
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become unsociable. In my opinion, this is a
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negative
development in certain ways.

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prefer
to
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messages
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just
have
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news
of their family or friends. They
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prefer
to
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them a message on social network.
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explains
that even if they
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under the same roof. They
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send
message than knocking at the door. I believe that in a few years
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will
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interact with each other through their cutting-edge devices.

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application to
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relationships. A few years ago,
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met their friends in bars and a party, whereas nowadays they
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to chat online thanks to dating site.
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case, they do not even know the person they are talking to.
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to encounter a person
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only
after the software proved that they have the same affinity.
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have more difficulty to talk with others when they are with a group of friends.

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technology has
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our way to communicate with each other. This affect, a lot our relationships. For
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reasons,
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people
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to interact together through social media and
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make
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new
friends thanks to dating applications.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people mke? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
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