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Nowadays people the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v.1

Nowadays people the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 1
These days technology is changing the way many people communicate with each other and has influenced the type of people interacting in various ways. These changes have some positive and negative implications in terms of communicating, but I believe the positive impact of technology on relationships is more conspicuous. Technology has ushered humanity into a new epoch in connection that has a profound impact on the interactions people make. First, it seems with more developed applications people prefer to use them to make contact which is so convenient. In addition, they cannot afford enough time to interact with each other anymore. Accordingly, social applications and networking have a wide appeal among people like Facebook and Whatsapp which make a way for keeping in touch or foster new relationships. What's more, the quality of interaction which people make through the virtual world has significantly declined in several respects like emotions, sentimentality, and passions. So that technology brings about confusion and misunderstanding since people do not able to express their real feelings via these modern devices vividly. It is a given that, most virtual communication people make, have less emotional express compare with face-to-face communications. But the thing is the advancements that technology affords, make the possible drawbacks pale In comparison. In the first place, it can pave the way for having a sustainable form of interaction. The access to the communication applications provides certain conditions to people stay in touch with each other at any time and anywhere. Also, with the advent of technology, the barrier of long-distance communications seems to be eradicated that had a huge impact on the relationships of those people emigrated overseas. It facilitates them to be in touch with their families more than before and provide for them a possibility to make a video call to see family members and enjoy it occasionally. In conclusion, technology has certainly revolutionized communication between people. Despite having some downside aspects that have affected people's relationship, it is a great step into future communication.
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a way for keeping in touch or foster new
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. What's more, the quality of interaction which
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through the virtual world has
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brings about confusion and misunderstanding since
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do not able to express their real feelings via these modern devices
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, have less emotional express compare with face-to-face communications.

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the thing is the advancements that
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technology
affords,
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the possible drawbacks pale
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. In the
first
place, it can pave the way for having a sustainable form of interaction. The access to the
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communication
applications provides certain conditions to
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people
stay in touch with each other at any time and anywhere.
Also
, with the advent of
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technology
, the barrier of long-distance communications seems to
be eradicated
that had a huge impact on the
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relationships
of those
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people
emigrated overseas. It facilitates them to be in touch with their families more than
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before
and provide for them a possibility to
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make
a video call to
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see
family members and enjoy it
occasionally
.

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between
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. Despite having
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downside aspects that have
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, it is a great step into future
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communication
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IELTS essay Nowadays people the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6.5
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