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nowadays the increasing of garbage (waste) is a real concern. why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem? v.1

nowadays the increasing of garbage (waste) is a real concern. why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 1
In this century, the human populations are increasing a lot than a few years ago. This has become the biggest issue that needs to be solved as soon as possible, because it makes the number of garbage are rising. In this essay, I will explain why this kind of issues are happening and how to solve it. There are a number of factors why this problem is happening. The first one, the human populations are too big, so it reduces the concern of people with their environmental issue that give a lot disadvantages to all the human beings. One way to solve it, is by increasing the human's care with their surroundings, for instance the government should give all the people some advices that can level up people's interests in the disposal, and also give more trash bin around the park or on the side of the street. Moreover, people are using too much plastic for their activity, As we know, plastic has become the top source of trash and really hard to be recycled. So, when people tare reducing plastic from their daily needs it can gain a better world for people, for instance, change the usage of plastic bag when they go for monthly shopping into a shopping bag, or the easiest one is by using their own bottle instead of plastic mineral bottle. All in all, we can easily take a care of the disposal problems as long there are support and action from the population around the country, because the small thing that people do can give many improvements to their surroundings.
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be solved
as
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soon
as possible,
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because
it
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makes
the number of garbage are rising. In this essay, I will
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explain
why this kind of issues are happening and how to solve it.

There are a number of factors why this problem is happening. The
first
one, the human populations are too
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big
,
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so
it
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reduces
the concern of
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people
with their environmental issue that
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give
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a lot disadvantages
to all the human beings. One way to solve it, is by increasing the human's care with their surroundings,
for instance
the
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government
should
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give
all the
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people
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some
advices that can level up
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people
's interests in the disposal, and
also
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give
more trash bin around the park or on the side of the street.

Moreover
,
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people
are using too much
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plastic
for their activity, As we know,
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plastic
has become the top source of trash and
really
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hard
to
be recycled
.
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So
, when
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people
tare reducing
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plastic
from their daily needs it can gain a better world for
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people
,
for instance
,
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change
the usage of
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plastic
bag when they go for monthly shopping into a shopping bag, or the easiest one is by using their
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own
bottle
instead
of
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plastic
mineral bottle.

All in all, we can
easily
take a care of the disposal problems as long there are support and action from the population around the country,
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because
the
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small
thing that
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people
do can
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give
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many
improvements to their surroundings.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay nowadays the increasing of garbage (waste) is a real concern. why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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