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Some people think that university should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Other thinks that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of wheter the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v.1

Some people think that university should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Other thinks that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of wheter the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 1
These days, many young guys decide to join university and to complete their education acquiring a degree, before directly diving in the world job. However, some people claim that there is a huge edge to overcome for many graduates, or rather their inability to effectively work. In this essay I will examine some of the problems related to these issues and then propose some solutions. One of the biggest problem is facing a workplace in which some specific skills are required that graduates have never learnt. This means that many courses offer a wide range of knowledge, but sometime they lack to teach practical skills. To tackle with this problem, universities could invest more money to support practical additional parts within a course; in other words, some tuitions should include how to deal with practical problems. Another issue is that many companies required already skilled students, that have experienced how to cope with some daily problems within the offices. In this case, however, the issue can be directly addressed by the companies that should understand that is quite rare to have a complete and deep education in all the imaginable field, right after the degree. This is to say that all employers should scale back their needs and should encourage young graduates to join their workplace, promoting some tutoring with experienced colleagues. On the other hand, I strongly believe that the majority of responsibilities are related to students. This is because, graduates have been plenty of opportunities to learn as much as they can and they cannot pretend to be driven in all steps of their educational growth. The way forward for graduates, could be to learn also be themselves how to acquire specific skills that could be useful in their future job. To sum up, there are some duties that universities have and that they have to tackle with, but I in my view the main problem is about prejudices both of employers and students that believed that graduates should not learn anymore after their degree.
These days,
many
young guys decide to
join
university and to complete their education acquiring a degree,
before
directly
diving in the world job.
However
,
some
people
claim that there is a huge edge to overcome for
many
graduates
, or
rather
their inability to
effectively
work.

In this essay I will examine
some of the
problems
related to these issues and then propose
some
solutions.

One of the biggest
problem
is facing a workplace in which
some
specific
skills
are required
that
graduates
have never
learnt
. This means that
many
courses offer a wide range of knowledge,
but
sometime they lack to teach practical
skills
. To tackle with this
problem
, universities could invest more money to support practical additional parts within a course;
in other words
,
some
tuitions
should include how to deal with practical problems.

Another issue is that
many
companies
required already skilled students, that have experienced how to cope with
some
daily
problems
within the offices.
In this case
,
however
, the issue can be
directly
addressed by the
companies
that should understand
that is
quite rare to have a complete and deep education in all the imaginable field, right after the degree. This is to say that all employers should scale back their needs and should encourage young
graduates
to
join
their workplace, promoting
some
tutoring with experienced colleagues.

On the other hand
, I
strongly
believe that the majority of responsibilities
are related
to students. This is
because
,
graduates
have been
plenty
of opportunities to learn as much as they
can and
they cannot pretend to
be driven
in all steps of their educational growth. The way forward for
graduates
, could be to learn
also
be themselves how to acquire specific
skills
that could be useful in their future job.

To sum up, there are
some
duties that universities have and that they
have to
tackle with,
but
I in my view the main
problem
is about prejudices both of employers and students that believed that
graduates
should not learn anymore after their degree.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that university should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Other thinks that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of wheter the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 1

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337 words
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