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some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. why is this? is this the best solution? v.7

some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. why is this? is this the best solution? v. 7
Although it is sometimes thought that the investment in making bicyle use easier is worth in reducing fuel cost, other people believe that it is not the right solution. In my opinion, i think use of bicyle can solve lot of problems in small town but car is necessary if people have to travel far. Admittedly, one of the major problem every country is facing is price increasing trend for non-renewable resources like petrol and diesel. This has direct impact on the inflation and economy of developing countries. In addition, excess use of these resources is causing pollution, which further results in multiple health problems. For instance, every year there is increase in the number of asthma cases getting reported. Also, use of cars causes lot of traffic on the road and increases the travel time. Therefore, it is one of the most critical issue and requires immediate action to mitigate risk. On the other hand, bicyle usage has multiple benefits. Firstly, usage of bicyle for daily travel keeps people fit. As people, we are very busy in this fast moving world and do not get time for exercise. Secondly, this mode of transportation is easy to purchase and does not require any running cost, as compared to the use of other mode of transport. Moreover, use of bicyle is very successful in some small areas where it is difficult to travel by car. To conclude, all countries must spread awareness and encourage people to use bicyle and should continue to invest in infrastructure so that people can use this easily.
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sometimes
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thought
that the investment in making
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bicyle
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use
easier is worth in reducing fuel cost, other
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people
believe that it is not the right solution. In my opinion,
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i
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think
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use
of
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bicyle
can solve
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lot of
problems in
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small
town
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but
car is necessary if
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people
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have to
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travel
far.

Admittedly
, one of the major problem every country is facing is price increasing trend for non-renewable resources like petrol and diesel. This has direct impact on the inflation and economy of
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developing countries
.
In addition
, excess
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use
of these resources is causing pollution, which
further
results in multiple health problems.
For instance
, every year there is increase in the number of asthma cases getting reported.
Also
,
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use
of cars causes
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lot of
traffic on the road and increases the
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travel
time.
Therefore
, it is one of the most critical issue and requires immediate action to mitigate
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risk
.

On the other hand
,
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bicyle
usage has multiple benefits.
Firstly
, usage of
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bicyle
for daily
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travel
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keeps
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people
fit. As
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people
, we are
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very
busy in this
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fast
moving world and do not
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get
time for exercise.
Secondly
, this mode of transportation is easy to
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purchase
and does not require any running cost, as compared to the
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use
of other mode of transport.
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,
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use
of
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bicyle
is
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very
successful in
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some
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small
areas where it is difficult to
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travel
by car.

To conclude
, all countries
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must
spread awareness and encourage
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people
to
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use
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bicyle
and should continue to invest in infrastructure
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so
that
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people
can
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use
this
easily
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. why is this? is this the best solution? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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