With people grow older, they need more professional treatment and careful caring which their adult kids may not offer. So some of them go to retirement communities or hospital to live with other people. I believe this phenomenon brings more merits then demerits to both elder people and adults.
There is no doubt that sending seniors to retirement communities can reducing adults’ pressure in providing health caring to their elder parents. Young adults need to spend more time on work for their future promotion so it means they have to spend less time with their family members, their elder parents, mostly. When adult children go outside to work, old people have to stay at home alone and they may feel isolate which may cause mental problems to them in a long term. Moreover, being alone at home also means elder people acquire no help when they meet emergencies such as slip on floor or fall down from stage. So when retirement communities can provide caring equipment and a place for many elder people to chat and live, there is no strange for why many old people want to live in it.
However, send olds to retirement communities also brings new problems. Firstly, it may cause financial pressure toward adult children since some retirement communities need expensive pay. Secondly, old people may also feel lonely and uncomfortable without their kids in life. I believe even if olds live in retirement communities, it also necessary for their kids to visit to them frequently. And I think good caring in communities give more benefits than being abandon at home to elder people. Since dangerous emergency can be avoided and elders can get immediate help if they have problems.
To summarize, I advocate that it can give more advantages if elder people live in retirement communities.
With
people
grow older, they need more professional treatment and careful
caring
which their adult kids may not offer.
So
some
of them go to
retirement
communities
or hospital to
live
with other
people
. I believe this phenomenon brings more merits
then
demerits to both
elder
people
and adults.
There is no doubt that sending seniors to
retirement
communities
can reducing
adults’
pressure in providing health
caring
to their
elder
parents. Young
adults
need to spend more time on work for their future promotion
so
it means they
have to
spend less time with their family members, their
elder
parents,
mostly
. When adult children go outside to work,
old
people
have to
stay at home
alone and
they may feel isolate which may cause mental problems to them in a long term.
Moreover
, being alone at home
also
means
elder
people
acquire no
help
when they
meet
emergencies such as slip on floor or fall down from stage.
So
when
retirement
communities
can provide
caring
equipment and a place for
many
elder
people
to chat and
live
, there is no strange for why
many
old
people
want to
live
in it.
However
,
send
olds to
retirement
communities
also
brings new problems.
Firstly
, it may cause financial pressure toward adult children since
some
retirement
communities
need expensive pay.
Secondly
,
old
people
may
also
feel lonely and uncomfortable without their kids in life. I believe even if olds
live
in
retirement
communities
,
it
also
necessary for their kids to visit to them
frequently
. And I
think
good
caring
in
communities
give more benefits than being abandon at home to
elder
people
. Since
dangerous
emergency can
be avoided
and
elders
can
get
immediate
help
if they have problems.
To summarize
, I advocate that it can give more advantages if
elder
people
live
in
retirement
communities
.
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47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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