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people do many tasks to improve their natural environment. which of the following tasks do you prefer and why? 1. plant trees and make parks2. using fewer plastic bags when shopping3. use public transportation v.2

people do many tasks to improve their natural environment. which of the following tasks do you prefer and why? 1. plant trees and make parks2. using fewer plastic bags when shopping3. use public transportation v. 2
The earth has been developed enormously with the advent of sophisticated technologies. Parallel to this, greenhouse effect, deforestation, drought, contamination are the fatal consequences of human beings that put the world in a vulnerable situation. There are several factors people could do in order to save our environment like plant trees and create parks, persuade local shops to stop providing plastic and improve and encourage people to use public transportation. However, the popular salient to which I vehemently cling is that people should try to use public transportation because it is more advantageous than other factors. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework. To commence with, although there are many tasks that people can do to save our planet, public transportation is one of the utmost important factors that play a consequential role in any given society. Broadly speaking, majorities of societies suffer from air pollution and fuel produced by automobiles, which create some problems for individuals. As a tangible example, in countries that public transportation is developed, they do not face problem regarding pollution and people lead a healthy life without any harmful disease. Indeed, with using public transportation not only can we develop our natural environment but also can provide an opportunity for people to lead a healthy lifestyle. To elucidate more on this issue, hardly can a society flourish and thrive without an improved public transportation owing to the fact that it helps the community to survive in the long run and not to be polluted. Another salient point in corroborating my stance is that if the government encourage people to use public transportation, not only can we save our environment but also can get to our destination on time without lateness. If we take a minute to ponder over it, crowds of people criticize about traffic jam and they have trials and tribulations getting to their destination in time. Not until people use the public transportation, can the problem of traffic jam be solved vigorously. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that we have to use improved transportation in order to be able to save our society and eradicate myriads of problems regarding traffics and diseases. If we neglect such important task, we will soon witness a society falling behind. However, every coin has two sides. Other factors would certainly be helpful for the community. For instance, the government should require people not to use plastic bags when shopping owing to the fact that these plastics are made up of chemical ingredients. So, not only can this plastic put our health in danger but also can be unwholesome for the natural environment because they take many years to decompose. However, it was a story in a nutshell, actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal viewpoint. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that people have many tasks to do in order to save their natural environment. One of the most significant tasks is using public transportation because it provides fertile ground for people to lead a healthy life and avoid air pollution by using fewer cars. In addition, it helps people avoid lateness because it would be able to cover every region in the town. However, other factors like not using plastic bags or plant trees might be helpful or useful as well.
The earth has
been developed
enormously
with the advent of sophisticated technologies. Parallel to this, greenhouse effect, deforestation, drought, contamination are the fatal consequences of human beings that put the world in a vulnerable situation. There are several
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factors
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people
could do in order to
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save
our
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environment
like plant trees and create parks, persuade local shops to
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stop
providing
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plastic
and
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improve
and encourage
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people
to
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use
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public
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transportation
.
However
, the popular salient to which I
vehemently
cling is that
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people
should try to
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use
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public
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transportation
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because
it is more advantageous than other
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factors
. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.

To commence with, although there are
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many
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tasks
that
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people
can do to
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save
our planet,
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public
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transportation
is one of the utmost
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important
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factors
that play a consequential role in any
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given
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society
.
Broadly
speaking, majorities of
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societies
suffer from air pollution and fuel produced by automobiles, which create
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some
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problems
for individuals. As a tangible example, in countries that
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public
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transportation
is developed
, they do not face
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problem
regarding pollution and
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people
lead a healthy life without any harmful disease.
Indeed
, with using
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public
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transportation
not
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only
can we develop our natural
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environment
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but
also
can provide an opportunity for
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people
to lead a healthy lifestyle. To elucidate more on this issue, hardly can a
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society
flourish and thrive without an
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improved
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public
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transportation
owing to the fact that it
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helps
the community to survive in the long run and not to
be polluted
.

Another salient point in corroborating my stance is that if the
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government
encourage
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people
to
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use
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public
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transportation
, not
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only
can we
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save
our
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environment
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but
also
can
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get
to our destination on time without lateness. If we take a minute to ponder over it, crowds of
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people
criticize about traffic
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jam and
they have trials and tribulations getting to their destination in time. Not until
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people
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use
the
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public
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transportation
, can the
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problem
of traffic jam
be solved
vigorously
. It can
be deduced
from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that we
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have to
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use
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improved
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transportation
in order to be able to
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save
our
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society
and eradicate myriads of
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problems
regarding traffics and diseases. If we neglect such
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important
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task
, we will
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soon
witness a
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society
falling behind.

However
, every coin has two sides. Other
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factors
would
certainly
be helpful for the community.
For instance
, the
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government
should require
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people
not to
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use
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plastic
bags when shopping owing to the fact that these
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plastics
are made
up of chemical ingredients.
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, not
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can this
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plastic
put our health in
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danger
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but
also
can be unwholesome for the natural
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environment
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because
they take
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many
years to decompose.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell, actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal viewpoint.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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people
have
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many
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tasks
to do in order to
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save
their natural
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environment
. One of the most significant
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tasks
is using
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public
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transportation
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because
it provides fertile ground for
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people
to lead a healthy life and avoid air pollution by using fewer cars.
In addition
, it
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helps
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people
avoid lateness
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because
it would be able to cover every region in the town.
However
, other
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factors
like not using
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plastic
bags or plant trees might be helpful or useful
as well
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
65Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay people do many tasks to improve their natural environment. which of the following tasks do you prefer and why? 1. plant trees and make parks2. using fewer plastic bags when shopping3. use public transportation v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
579 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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