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Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why they do this? Is it a positive or negative trend? v.2

Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why they do this? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 2
These days our access to information is greater than it ever was thanks in large part to our connection to the internet. Many of us use this connectivity to keep abreast of local and global events via social media. In this essay, I will examine why people do this and explain why, despite the essay access to information, I feel that it can negatively impact society. There are many reasons why people turn to social media for their news, but the most oblivious one is convenience. Whereas in the past, it was necessary to wait for the TV news at 6pm or for the newspaper to be delivered each morning, now this information is in our hands instantly via the apps on our phones. As soon as we click on Facebook or Twitter, for instance, we see the latest headlines and developments without even having to search for them. As such, we can be not only better informed about local current affairs, but about global events too. Clearly, this essay and instant access to information is the main reason people are turning to social media rather than traditional news source. Although it is certainly convenient, this trend has a worrying impact. This is because the information we receive is heavily biased. Indeed, as our social media feeds are increasingly personalized, we tend to be served only the news and stories that appeal to us, as decided by an algorithm. What your friends and connections like and share also impacts your feed, which further limits what you view. In other words, if you are politically left-wing, you will probably only be encountering stories that align with your biases and beliefs. In this way, we are blocked from engaging with views contrary to our own, which can give rise to greater prejudice, ignorance and intolerance. In conclusion, people use social media to follow the news because it is an easy way to stay informed. While this is potentially valuable, if people are not aware of the way their news feed is tailored to them, and do not seek information from other sources, the effects of accessing the news via social media can be damaging.
These days our access to
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information
is greater than it ever was thanks in large part to our connection to the internet.
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of us
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use
this connectivity to
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keep
abreast of local and global
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events
via
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social
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media
. In this essay, I will examine why
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people
do this and
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explain
why, despite the essay access to
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information
, I feel that it can
negatively
impact society.

There are
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many
reasons why
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people
turn to
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social
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media
for their
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news
,
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but
the most oblivious one is convenience. Whereas in the past, it was necessary to wait for the TV
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news
at 6pm or for the newspaper to
be delivered
each morning,
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now
this
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information
is in our hands
instantly
via the apps on our phones. As
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soon
as we click on Facebook or Twitter,
for instance
, we
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see
the latest headlines and developments without even having to search for them. As such, we can be not
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only
better informed about local
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current
affairs,
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but
about global
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events
too.
Clearly
, this essay and instant access to
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information
is the main reason
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people
are turning to
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social
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media
rather
than traditional
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news
source.

Although it is
certainly
convenient, this trend has a worrying impact. This is
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because
the
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information
we receive is
heavily
biased.
Indeed
, as our
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social
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media
feeds are
increasingly
personalized, we tend to
be served
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only
the
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news
and stories that appeal to us, as decided by an algorithm. What your friends and connections like and share
also
impacts your feed, which
further
limits what you view.
In other words
, if you are
politically
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left
-wing, you will
probably
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only
be encountering stories that align with your biases and beliefs. In this way, we
are blocked
from engaging with views contrary to our
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own
, which can give rise to greater prejudice, ignorance and intolerance.

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In
conclusion,
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people
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use
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social
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media
to follow the
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news
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because
it is an easy way to stay informed. While this is
potentially
valuable, if
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people
are not aware of the way their
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news
feed
is tailored
to them, and do not seek
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information
from other sources, the effects of accessing the
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news
via
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social
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media
can be damaging.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why they do this? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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