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Writing task: Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today, everything should be done online. Do you agree or disagree v.1

Writing task: Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today, everything should be done online. v. 1
There is a perception that the traditional way of giving lectures in auditoriums in this era of modernization is outdated and that instead, every session should take place exclusively on the internet. While this argument can be justified to some extent, it seems to me that each avenue shares its own merits. On the one hand, web-based classes provide just-in-time learning. Specifically, those studying with the aim of being promoted at work will get the most benefit from this method. A case in point is that lectures can be flexibly accessed at each learner’s convenience, in terms of both location and schedule. This is attributable to the wide coverage of the Internet, and students can get accessed to the lessons anywhere, without spending time commuting to a specific lecture hall. Regarding the schedule, as students nowadays are also actively engaged in extra-curricular activities or part-time jobs besides studying, it would be advantageous for them to choose their own learning time. . The utmost factor of virtual education is the students’ ability to manage time. Due to this flexibility and convenience, online lectures are widely applied. On the other hand, I contend that it is unreasonable to completely replace conventional classrooms thanks to their outstanding advantages. Traditional lectures allow learners to interact with lecturers. To put it in another way, this way of teaching helps students get more practice of verbal interaction with professors and other members in the class. For instance, students can Promote face-to-face interaction between lecturers and learners. This means that learners are able to ask teachers for clarification of lesson content easily, as well as receive immediate feedback for their performance. In addition, peer interaction during the class is of paramount importance in improving students’ soft skills such as teamwork or communication skill. . This feature distinguishes this avenue from online education. Taking everything into account, it is evident that virtual classes give participants the freedom to Choose their convenient learning time whereas teaching in conventional way provide students the opportunity to get oral communication regularly. From my point of view, online lectures cannot completely replace the education that has existed in a long-run because both ways are mutually supportive.
There is a perception that the traditional way of giving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
in auditoriums in this era of modernization
is outdated
and that
instead
, every session should take place exclusively on the internet. While this argument can
be justified
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, it seems to me that each avenue shares its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
merits.

On the one hand, web-based
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
-in-time learning.
Specifically
, those studying with the aim of
being promoted
at work will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the most benefit from this method. A case in point is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
can be
flexibly
accessed at each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learner’s
convenience, in terms of both location and schedule. This is attributable to the wide coverage of the Internet, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
accessed to the lessons anywhere, without spending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
commuting to a specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lecture
hall. Regarding the schedule, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
nowadays are
also
actively
engaged in extra-curricular activities or part-time jobs
besides
studying, it would be advantageous for them to choose their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
The utmost factor of virtual education is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students’
ability to manage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. Due to this flexibility and convenience, online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
are
widely
applied.

On the other hand
, I contend that it is unreasonable to completely replace conventional classrooms thanks to their outstanding advantages. Traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learners
to interact with lecturers. To put it in another way, this way of teaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more practice of verbal interaction with professors and other members in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.
For instance
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can Promote face-to-face interaction between lecturers and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learners
. This means that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learners
are able to ask teachers for clarification of lesson content
easily
,
as well
as receive immediate feedback for their performance.
In addition
, peer interaction during the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
is of paramount importance in improving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students’
soft
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as teamwork or communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
This feature distinguishes this avenue from online education.

Taking everything into account, it is evident that virtual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
give participants the freedom to Choose their convenient learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
whereas teaching in conventional way provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
the opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
oral communication
regularly
. From my point of view, online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lectures
cannot completely replace the education that has existed in a long-run
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
both ways are
mutually
supportive.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Writing task: Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today, everything should be done online. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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