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Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. v. 2
Technology has changed our lives tremendously such as online sites to talk with friends and relatives without concern of time, but on the other hand benefits of physical meetings can never be replaced by the artificial media. I believe we should try to arrange get together whenever we can get time. Social media has reduced the gap between the people. People have been extremely busy in their work life; proving themselves: gaining new skills: meeting deadlines: and delivering quality work that they do not get time to meet the relatives in person. Firstly, in this era social media sites- Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Snapchat- have played an incredible role, where you can talk to your loved ones at any time, can drop SMS and they will answer at their convenience. People feel less lonely. Secondly, Misunderstanding has been reduced as they know your busy schedule. Thirdly, these websites are also playing part to solve problems. You make friends from your office, experts, relatives, schoolmates. If you get any problem, you can ask related person and get solution instantly. Additionally, it is cheaper as internet access is widely available at minimum price due to competition among service providers, while going out in restaurants have become quite expensive. As per study, each year internet users are exceeding with steep percentage. Nevertheless, another group thinks that social media groups are not the replacement of face to face meetings. Meeting personally creates more emotions and bond is stronger. Meet ups are specially organized in busy life routine, which gives idea to another person, how much important are they. People do activities together and children have fun. For instance, if my sister lived in another country, I would have never felt so much closer to her. You can arrange different kind of activities like Barbeque party in the back of the house, wall climbing for children, traditional games to engage all of the family. In conclusion Physically meeting creates a stronger bond while online chats reduce the time of response. I will strongly suggest that we should meet each other more often
Technology has
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changed
our
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lives
tremendously
such as online sites to talk with friends and relatives without concern of
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time
,
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but
on the other hand
benefits of physical
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meetings
can never
be replaced
by the artificial
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media
. I believe we should try to arrange
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get
together whenever we can
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get
time.

Social
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media
has
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reduced
the gap between the
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people
.
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People
have been
extremely
busy in their work life; proving themselves: gaining new
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skills
:
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meeting
deadlines: and delivering quality work that they do not
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get
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time
to
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meet
the relatives in person.

Firstly
, in this era social
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media
sites- Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Snapchat- have played an incredible role, where you can talk to your
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loved
ones at any
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time
, can drop
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SMS and
they will answer at their convenience.
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People
feel less lonely.
Secondly
, Misunderstanding has been
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reduced
as they know your busy schedule.
Thirdly
, these websites are
also
playing part to solve problems. You
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make
friends from your office, experts, relatives, schoolmates. If you
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get
any problem, you can ask related person and
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get
solution
instantly
.
Additionally
, it is cheaper
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
internet access is
widely
available at minimum price due to competition among service providers, while going out in restaurants have become quite expensive. As per study, each year internet users are exceeding with steep percentage.

Nevertheless
, another group
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thinks
that social
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media
groups are not the replacement of face to face
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meetings
.
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Meeting
personally
creates more emotions and bond is stronger.
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Meet
ups are
specially
organized in busy life routine, which gives
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idea
to another person, how much
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important
are they.
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People
do activities together and children have fun.
For instance
, if my sister
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lived
in another country, I would have never felt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much closer to her. You can arrange
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kind of activities like
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Barbeque
party in the back of the
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house
, wall climbing for children, traditional games to engage
Consider using "all the".
all of the
family.

In conclusion
Physically
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meeting
creates a stronger bond while online chats
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reduce
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
of response. I will
strongly
suggest that we should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
each other more
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often
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. v. 2

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  American English
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345 words
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