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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think face-to-face interaction is essential. v. 4
It is common these days for friendships to be made using websites designed to connect people. A group of people perceive this is a healthy thing while others differ with this opinion. In their view, it is important to physically know people before you can be friends with them. This essay will be covering merits of both these thoughts. Knowing people using modern means of communication allow you to learn from individuals across the globe. For instance, an individual sitting in a café in Canada can interact with another one working in Australia though geographically they are miles apart. To give a clear example, this interaction allows them to exchange knowledge about their communities, religions and more. For these reasons, friendships made over the internet are advantageous. Some people support the opinion that, until you have met a person you cannot trust them. There have been multiple instances of online harassment and frauds done by strangers you don’t know personally. For example, recently under the cyber-crime law cases were reported where screenshots of your chat or pictures you shared were used for blackmailing. Additionally, more severe damage was done where people accessed the other persons computer remotely and conducted banking transactions. Incidents such as these make people doubt such relationships. In my opinion, knowing and making friends with more and more people is good. To conclude, I believe we just need to be a little careful about the content we share with them and this applies to friends in general not limited to those made over the internet only.
It is common these days for friendships to
be made
using websites designed to connect
people
. A group of
people
perceive this is a healthy thing while others differ with this opinion. In their view, it is
important
to
physically
know
people
before
you can be friends with them. This essay will be covering merits of both these thoughts.

Knowing
people
using modern means of communication
allow
you to learn from individuals across the globe.
For instance
, an individual sitting in a café in Canada can interact with another one working in Australia though
geographically
they are miles apart. To give a
clear
example, this interaction
allows
them to exchange knowledge about their communities, religions and more. For these reasons, friendships made over the internet are advantageous.

Some
people
support the opinion that, until you have met a person you cannot trust them. There have been multiple instances of online harassment and frauds done by strangers you don’t know
personally
.
For example
, recently under the cyber-crime law cases
were reported
where screenshots of your chat or pictures you shared were
used
for blackmailing.
Additionally
, more severe damage
was done
where
people
accessed the other
persons
computer
remotely
and conducted banking transactions. Incidents such as these
make
people
doubt such relationships.

In my opinion, knowing and making friends with more and more
people
is
good
.
To conclude
, I believe we
just
need to be a
little
careful about the content we share with them and this
applies to
friends
in general
not limited to those made over the internet
only
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think face-to-face interaction is essential. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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