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Many criminals commit for the crimes as soon as the released from prison? What do you think are the causes. What possible solutions can you suggest. v.2

Many criminals commit for the crimes as soon as the released from prison? What do you think are the causes. What possible solutions can you suggest. v. 2
Now a days in many countries, the crime rate is at a mammoth rate. Once the criminal is set free from the prison, they will do the crime again. There are numerous reasons which are responsible for uprooting the problem. However, some solvents are there to curb this problem. I will portray inspector and remedies involving segments The predominant reason of this is, many criminals are not born offenders but the circumstances often incite them to commit a felony. When such type of predominated convicts are came out from prisons, they are expelled from the society and isolated from their own families. Due to this, they inclined to recommit the crimes. In addition, after releasing from prisons, criminals find it very difficult to get the job because of their criminal record. For instance, in India, if any one want to acquire the job, it is essential that applicant do not have any record of indulging in any criminal activities. Because of this reason, they again indulged in illegal practices to earn their livelihood to sustain life such as robbing, thefting etcetera and after a passage of time became serious killers in their life. However, there are some solvants to eradicate this problem. Primarily, it is the responsibility of the government that they ought to urge people that they should not expel the criminals. Besides this, people should give another chance to criminals to usher the new life. Subsequently, offenders should get a chance to show their superiority among the people. In addition, government should make an arrangements in the prison, to give the offenders some technical or other things training so that after releasing from prison, delinquents use their skills to combat with the hurdles of their life. To recapitulate, everyone has their own views, I do not deny any of them but I cogitate that there is a need to understand the gravity of the problem and address it before it gets too late.
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Now a days
in
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many
countries, the crime rate is at a mammoth rate. Once the
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criminal
is set
free from the
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prison
, they will do the crime again. There are numerous reasons which are responsible for uprooting the
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problem
.
However
,
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some
solvents are there to curb this
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problem
. I will portray inspector and remedies involving
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segments


The predominant reason of this is,
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many
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criminals
are not born offenders
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but
the circumstances
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often
incite them to commit a felony. When such type of predominated convicts are
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came
out from
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prisons
, they
are expelled
from the society and isolated from their
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own
families. Due to this, they inclined to recommit the crimes.
In addition
, after releasing from
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prisons
,
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criminals
find it
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very
difficult to
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get
the job
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because
of their
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criminal
record.
For instance
, in India, if
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
want to acquire the job, it is essential
The verb 'do' is plural. Did you mean: "that applicant does"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
that applicant do
not have any record of indulging in any
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criminal
activities.
Because of this
reason, they again indulged in illegal practices to earn their livelihood to sustain life such as robbing,
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thefting
etcetera and after a passage of time became serious killers in their life.

However
, there are
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some
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solvants
to eradicate this
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problem
.
Primarily
, it is the responsibility of the
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government
that they ought to urge
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people
that they should not expel the
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criminals
.
Besides
this,
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people
should give another chance to
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criminals
to usher the new life.
Subsequently
, offenders should
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get
a chance to
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show
their superiority among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
In addition
,
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government
should
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make
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an arrangements
in the
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prison
, to give the offenders
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some
technical or other things training
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so
that after releasing from
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prison
, delinquents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to combat with the hurdles of their life.

To recapitulate, everyone has their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
views, I do not deny any of them
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but
I cogitate that there is a need to understand the gravity of the
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problem
and address it
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before
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
too late.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many criminals commit for the crimes as soon as the released from prison? What do you think are the causes. What possible solutions can you suggest. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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