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Nowadays people live in societies that consumer goods have become cheaper Do you think the advantages of consumer goods being cheaper outweigh the disadvantages v.2

Nowadays people live in societies that consumer goods have become cheaper Do you think the advantages of consumer goods being cheaper outweigh the disadvantages v. 2
In this recent century, the consumer goods are available with a wide range of option where it allows people to purchase goods at cheaper prices. This brings the benefits for people to possess more goods without worrying to make a choice between goods. However, I believe that the disadvantages of cheaper consumer goods outweigh the advantages, because it can lead the society to become materialistic and there are possibilities for people to obtain impulsive purchasing habits which can affect the environment. The cheaper consumer goods would provide a various options for the public. In other words, people do not have to make a choice between those options, because the price is cheap, they can afford most of goods. The more possession of goods can be available, it can lead to feeling of satisfaction and feeling of security as well as comfortable lifestyles. The comfortable lifestyles which can result in improvement of standard of living. Hence, the consumer goods being cheap can be beneficial for the improvement of living standard and the variety of options to choose from. On the other hand, the more goods at a cheaper price can lead to materialistic society. If people possess more goods, it can easily form a competition about people' s possessions. For example, when people owned a car, other people may try to possess two cars to compete. In the worst case, people judge other person by their materialistic possessions instead of other values. Thus, it can transform the society into materialistic society. In addition, the impulsive purchasing habits are inevitable. People do not have to buy necessity items, only because all consumer goods are cheap. This impulsive shopping habits can affect a factory to producing of goods excessively and which results in more wastes to the environment. Because more goods are available, people will get easily substitute goods with new one, and this can produce massive amounts of trashes to the environment. Therefore, the impulsive purchasing habits can have a harmful effect to the environment. In conclusion, the cheaper consumer goods provide a wide range of selections that improves the standard of living, but it causes damages to societal and environmental aspects. It cannot deny that the society can change into materialistic and the environments can be damaged by impulsive purchasing habits. Therefore, the cheaper consumer goods have more of disadvantages than that of advantages.
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to possess more
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without worrying to
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cheaper
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outweigh the advantages,
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because
it can lead the
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society
to become
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materialistic
and there are possibilities for
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people
to obtain
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habits
which can affect the environment.

The
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would provide a various
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for the public. In
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, they can afford most of
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. The more possession of
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can be available, it can lead to feeling of satisfaction and feeling of security
as well
as comfortable lifestyles. The comfortable lifestyles which can result in improvement of standard of living.
Hence
, the
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consumer
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goods
being
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cheap
can be beneficial for the improvement of living standard and the variety of
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options
to choose from.

On the
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other
hand, the more
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goods
at a
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price can lead to
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materialistic
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society
. If
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people
possess more
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form a competition about
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a car,
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other
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may try to possess two cars to compete. In the worst case,
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judge
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materialistic
possessions
instead
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values.
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into
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materialistic
society.

In addition
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are inevitable.
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can affect a factory to producing of
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excessively
and which results in more wastes to the environment.
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with new one, and this can produce massive amounts of trashes to the environment.
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can have a harmful effect to the environment.

In conclusion
, the
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consumer
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provide a wide range of selections that
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improves
the standard of living,
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can
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materialistic
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be damaged
by
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habits
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, the
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have more of disadvantages than that of advantages.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
69Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people live in societies that consumer goods have become cheaper Do you think the advantages of consumer goods being cheaper outweigh the disadvantages v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
393 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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