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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the word costs numerous government's expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the word costs numerous government's expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. v. 4
The authorities are spending enormous money to rebuild old building hence lead to an argument whether the fund should used in construct new street and building or continuing reconstructed the old things. In this essay, i will represent my opinion about this situation. On the one hand, restoration an ancient architecture help our country to protect culture building. Inheritance is the things represent for national faces. When other tourist visits one nation, they excited about finding that nation traditional, so aged building always is their destination. Due to, each individual need to have a responsibility to keep and conserve the relics they have. On the other hand, with the path of development over the world, the union should consider on pedestrian accommodation such as condominium, house, street, . . . They need a comfortable place to have the best effective work. They earned money to receive things they deserved. Walk on a beautiful lane, lived in a cozy house and experienced the best things they have made. If the country construction delicate, your country seemed to have intensive growth. Naturally, protect inheritance is importance but looking to news things and continuing improve the country construction to make citizen have a better life get comeuppance prioritize. In conclusion, i believe that government should concentrated on advancement of news construction. Enjoy the pleasant and used it yo protect old building.
The authorities are spending enormous money to rebuild
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old
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building
hence
lead to an argument whether the fund should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "use"
used
in construct new street and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
or continuing reconstructed the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
things. In this essay,
Did you mean "I"?
i
will represent my opinion about this situation.

On the one hand, restoration an ancient architecture
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help
our
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country
to protect culture
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
. Inheritance is the things represent for national faces. When other tourist visits one nation, they excited about finding that nation traditional,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
aged
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
always is their destination. Due to, each individual need to have a responsibility to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
and conserve the relics they have.

On the other hand
, with the path of development over the world, the union should consider on pedestrian accommodation such as condominium,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, street
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, .
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.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
They need a comfortable place to have the best effective work. They earned money to receive things they deserved. Walk on a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
lane,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
in a cozy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and experienced the best things they have made. If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
construction delicate, your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
seemed to have intensive growth.

Naturally
, protect inheritance is importance
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but
looking to news things and continuing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
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country
construction to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
citizen have a better life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
comeuppance prioritize.

In conclusion
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "concentrate"
concentrated
on advancement of news construction. Enjoy the pleasant and
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used
it
Did you mean "to", "you" or "your"?
yo
protect
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old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the word costs numerous government's expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
228 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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