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Nowadays people can buy a large variety of household goods more than ever before in most countries in the world Is this a good or bad development Give your opinion and examples v.1

Nowadays people can buy a large variety of household goods more than ever before in most countries in the world Is this a good or bad development Give your opinion and examples v. 1
In present scenario, certain people opine that we have too many options to choose. I totally agree with this statement because with the boom in the field of technology, and infrastructure, many choices are now inevitable for people. Undoubtedly, the internet is an amazing innovation that has changed our lives drastically with so many alternatives. Nowadays, the computer is a part of every household, which was unavailable in the past. In the same way, an electronic gadgets are also equally playing an influential role in our daily lives. This is to say that, people are using such electronic instruments for multiple purpose. Certainly, in terms of education, people can now choose their universities and colleges for the higher education through online as it provides a plethora of options to opt. For example, in the past, people used to have no options regarding education, however, these days, the internet has made people more choosy as it offers numerous career options. Furthermore, Infrastructural development has brought a number of choices for individuals. In present days, different types of transport systems are widely available in all over the world, which were absent in the earlier days. This happens only because of manufacturing companies of vehicles that are continually producing differ model of affordable, and comfortable vehicles. Therefore, people are in dilemma whether to opt the public transport or the private one. At this point, they have too many choices to go for out by a public or by a personal car. This has been confirmed by a recent study in the United States, which showed that development in infrastructure have made people a bit more choosy in terms of selecting transport systems as it creates a number of options to select. In conclusion, I completely agree that people have too many choices nowadays, and this happens only because of advancement in technology, and infrastructure. In fact, people will have even more options to choose in the future with the innovation in these fields.
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with the boom in the field of technology, and infrastructure,
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choices
are
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.

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, the internet is an amazing innovation that has
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changed
our
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lives
drastically
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many
alternatives. Nowadays, the computer is a part of every household, which was unavailable in the past.
In the same way
, an electronic
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gadgets
are
also
equally
playing an influential role in our daily
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lives
. This is to say that,
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people
are using such electronic instruments for multiple purpose.
Certainly
, in terms of education,
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people
can
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now
choose their universities and colleges for the higher education through online as it provides a plethora of
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options
to opt.
For example
, in the past,
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people
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used
to have no
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options
regarding education,
however
, these days, the internet has made
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people
more choosy as it offers numerous career options.

Furthermore
, Infrastructural development has brought a number of
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choices
for individuals. In present days,
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different
types of transport systems are
widely
available in all over the world, which were absent in the earlier days. This happens
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only
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of manufacturing
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companies
of vehicles that are
continually
producing differ model of affordable, and comfortable vehicles.
Therefore
,
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people
are in dilemma whether to opt the public transport or the private one. At this point, they have too
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many
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choices
to go for out by a public or by a personal car. This has
been confirmed
by a recent study in the United States, which
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showed
that development in infrastructure have made
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people
a bit more choosy in terms of selecting transport systems as it creates a number of
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options
to select.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
that
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people
have too
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many
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choices
nowadays, and this happens
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only
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because
of advancement in technology, and infrastructure. In fact,
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people
will have even more
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options
to choose in the future with the innovation in these fields.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people can buy a large variety of household goods more than ever before in most countries in the world Is this a good or bad development Give your opinion and examples v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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