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Nowadays people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Nowadays people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. v. 1
Online communication sites are growing very fast in today's world. People often use this site to communicate with each other, not only it has a positive side, but also it may impact individuals or society negatively. Thus, I believe, we should look at both positive as well as a negative side to draw the conclusion. From the invention of mobile phones and computer, the usage of the gadgets is increasing tremendously, with this the facilities of social networking sites has also taken the boom from last few years. However, the facilities provide good communication between the persons and brought the world together. For example, with the help of Facebook, Whatsapp, peoples from different countries can talk with each other easily as well as they can share information, news and much more. Moreover, by efficient use of this site's individual can also enhance their knowledge by learning new language, understanding different cultures, and many more. Not only the social networking sites have a positive impact, but also they provide some gloomy impact also on society and peoples. On the other hand, as social networking sites provide better communication, but it contains some negative impact such as people uses this site to communicate with other people, but they cannot communicate with their family and friends properly as they spend more time on the computer and cell phones. Also, the ability of creativity is lost by the individuals. In addition, this kind of site also lessens the concentration power of the individuals. Furthermore, people may face lots of problems and can also suffer from depression and anxiety, due more usage of this site. Lastly, I believe individual living in the society, should use this kind of facilities wisely. They should more time with their family and friends, instead of spending time on this social networking site.
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sites
are growing
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very
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fast
in
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today
's world.
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People
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often
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use
this
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site
to communicate with each
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other
, not
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only
it has a
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positive
side,
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but
also
it may
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impact
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individuals
or society
negatively
.
Thus
, I believe, we should look at both
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positive
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as well as
a
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negative
side to draw the conclusion.

From the invention of mobile phones and computer, the usage of the gadgets is increasing
tremendously
, with this the facilities of
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social
networking
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sites
has
also
taken the boom from last few years.
However
, the facilities provide
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good
communication between the persons and brought the world together.
For example
, with the
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help
of Facebook,
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Whatsapp
,
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peoples
from
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different
countries can talk with each
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other
easily
as well
as they can share information, news and much more.
Moreover
, by efficient
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use
of this site's
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individual
can
also
enhance their knowledge by learning new language, understanding
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different
cultures, and
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many
more. Not
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only
the
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social
networking
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sites
have a
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positive
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impact
,
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but
also
they provide
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some
gloomy
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impact
also
on society and peoples.

On the
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other
hand, as
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social
networking
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sites
provide better communication,
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but
it contains
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some
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negative
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impact
such as
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people
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uses
this
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site
to communicate with
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other
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people
,
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but
they cannot communicate with their family and friends
properly
as they spend more time on the computer and cell phones.
Also
, the ability of creativity
is lost
by the
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individuals
.
In addition
, this kind of
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site
also
lessens the concentration power of the
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individuals
.
Furthermore
,
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people
may face lots of problems and can
also
suffer from depression and anxiety, due more usage of this site.

Lastly
, I believe
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individual
living in the society, should
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use
this kind of facilities
wisely
. They should more time with their family and friends,
instead
of spending time on this
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social
networking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
site
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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