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Nowadays, people are moving to other countries to seek jobs. Some people think it affects the children of such home negativity while some others think it is beneficial to them. Discuss both sides and state your opinion v.1

Nowadays, people are moving to other countries to seek jobs. Some people think it affects the children of such home negativity while some others think it is beneficial to them. 1
There is no doubt that people are moving abroad for work. Some people believe that Children of such families have adverse implications, if any of their family member is away, while others find it advantageous. In my opinion, I consider working abroad. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why working overseas is beneficial. Professionals who are seeking to work abroad can also create better opportunities for their children’s future lives. On-site opportunities are increasing substantially, as there is a huge demand for work, due to this individual can have an elevation in their career, as well as open gateways for a prosperous future of their children. To illustrate this, nowadays, organizations are offering family visa, which permits them to settle abroad where, company bears the visa fees and is liable to other immigration expenses. In addition to this, children can be benefited with the facilities which, otherwise may not be available in their own country. Children cannot tackle with the unfavourable conditions, that may arise due to separation with their loved ones. Therefore, this may have a negative impact on their studies and may feel lonely, as children are sensitive and emotionally attached with their family members. For example, if either of the parent move abroad to work for the long term, then children may feel depressed as they are living apart. As a result, the child may become dull and gloomy. This, in turn, will have a negative effect on his life. In conclusion, although people may vary in their opinions, I think that working abroad stand a better chance to generate more benefits for their children and help them to fulfil their aspirations, without being deprived of their loved one.
There is no doubt that
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people
are moving
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abroad
for
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work
.
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Some
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people
believe that
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Children
of such
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families
have adverse implications, if any of their
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family
member is away, while others find it advantageous. In my opinion, I consider working
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abroad
. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why working overseas is beneficial.

Professionals who are seeking to
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work
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abroad
can
also
create better opportunities for their
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children’s
future
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lives
. On-site opportunities are increasing
substantially
, as there is a huge demand for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, due to this individual can have an elevation in their career,
as well
as open gateways for a prosperous future of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. To illustrate this, nowadays, organizations are offering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
visa, which permits them to settle
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
where,
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company
bears the visa fees and is liable to other immigration expenses.
In addition
to this,
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children
can
be benefited
with the facilities which,
otherwise
may not be available in their
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own
country.

Children cannot tackle with the
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unfavourable
conditions, that may arise due to separation with their
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loved
ones.
Therefore
, this may have a
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negative
impact on their studies and may feel lonely, as
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children
are sensitive and
emotionally
attached with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members.
For example
, if either of the parent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for the long term, then
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children
may feel depressed as they are living apart.
As a result
, the child may become dull and gloomy. This, in turn, will have a
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negative
effect on his life.

In conclusion
, although
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people
may vary in their opinions, I
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think
that working
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abroad
stand a better chance to generate more benefits for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and
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help
them to fulfil their aspirations, without
being deprived
of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
one.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people are moving to other countries to seek jobs. Some people think it affects the children of such home negativity while some others think it is beneficial to them. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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