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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. Discuss both views v.18

Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. 18
Now days, there are different prospects about the keeping of animals and creatures. In other words, most disagreements are about how to keep creatures and what should be the conditions. In this essay, I will discuss the views not only economical and personal but also ecological opinion. Firstly, one of the most important advantages of keeping animals in zoos, is protecting them from bad weathers, hunters, and feeding accessibility. In other hand, many endangered species are transmitted to zoos or natural parks through scientific processes such as artificial insemination, to prevent the extinction of their generation. For instance, African lions and Siberian tigers. In fact, if we create a lot of restrictions on animals like imprisoning them in tight spaces, they would not be able to have bracing air and pursue other animals. Furthermore, the circumstance of keeping creatures is vital for living them. Consequently, living animals in natural dweller must be a major program for carrying them in run the world, to give them the chance of exposure usual being. Secondly, some animals are becoming extinct, that's why saving them is very crucial. Even though governments are spending huge budget for keeping them, the revenues will offset all costs. More specifically, take a kind of Chinese bear famous as a panda, a wide range of people travels to China to see it in zoos or circuses every year. However, most citizens decline the investment of governments for caring animals and find it as futile. In addition, they prefer that states invest in improving infrastructure, Like some highways, airports, hospitals and so on. Thus, the persons consider the development of the country more important than conservation of animals. Finally, animals, caring plays an important role in the advancement of scientific research, whereas the approach has been rejected in sakes of morally and religiously. Moreover, a plenty of creatures are killed because the commercial and scientific goals every year. For example, the generation of African elephants is at risk due to the sale of ivory in black markets. Therefore, most people believe we have no right to use animals of amusement and in labs. In conclusion, keeping animals in zoos might have countless advantages in provided that they are not kept away from their natural habitat. Reasonable causes behind that, respect the rights of animals to have better living conditions.
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Now
days, there are
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different
prospects about the keeping of
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animals
and
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creatures
.
In other words
, most disagreements are about how to
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keep
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creatures
and what should be the conditions. In this essay, I will discuss the views not
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only
economical and personal
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but
also
ecological opinion.

Firstly
, one of the most
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important
advantages of keeping
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animals
in zoos, is protecting them from
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bad
weathers, hunters, and feeding accessibility. In other hand,
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many
endangered species
are transmitted
to zoos or natural parks through scientific processes such as artificial insemination, to
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prevent
the extinction of their generation.
For instance
, African lions and Siberian tigers. In fact, if we create
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a lot of
restrictions on
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animals
like imprisoning them in tight spaces, they would not be able to have bracing air and pursue other
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animals
.
Furthermore
, the circumstance of keeping
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creatures
is vital for living them.
Consequently
, living
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animals
in natural dweller
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must
be a major program for carrying them in run the world, to give them the chance of exposure usual being.

Secondly
,
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some
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animals
are becoming extinct, that's why saving them is
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very
crucial.
Even though
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governments
are spending huge budget for keeping them, the revenues will offset all costs. More
specifically
, take a kind of Chinese bear
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famous
as a panda, a wide range of
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people
travels to China to
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see
it in zoos or circuses every year.
However
, most citizens decline the investment of
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governments
for caring
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animals
and find it as futile.
In addition
, they prefer that states invest in improving infrastructure, Like
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some
highways, airports, hospitals and
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so
on.
Thus
, the persons consider the development of the country more
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important
than conservation of animals.

Finally
,
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animals
, caring plays an
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important
role in the advancement of scientific research, whereas the approach has
been rejected
in
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sakes
of
morally
and
religiously
.
Moreover
, a
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plenty
of
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creatures
are killed
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because
the commercial and scientific goals every year.
For example
, the generation of African elephants is at
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risk
due to the sale of ivory in black markets.
Therefore
, most
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people
believe we have no right to
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use
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animals
of amusement and in labs.

In conclusion
, keeping
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animals
in zoos might have countless advantages in provided that they are not
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kept
away from their natural habitat. Reasonable causes behind that, respect the rights of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
to have better living conditions.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. 18

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