It is true that children have overly enforced from the parents to achieve success in their life. There are several reasons for such approach of parents, which on the whole, I consider to be very negative.
Most parents have too much concern about the future career of their offspring. They think that being a successful person will bring a lot of opportunities for children. For example, most parents expect their children would become a doctor or engineer, and they can secure future jobs. As a result, children performance at school would be the main focus of parents to assess them and keep them in enormous study timetable to achieve higher exam score. Therefore, the wariness of better future might lead the forcible attitude of parents to their offspring.
However, I would argue that the above development has harmful effects on children. It can be both depressive and discouraging. Many parents tend to engage their children only for future achievements, and they omit the entertainment part of the youngsters. This could affect their mental wellbeing and cause of psychological sufferings. A recent survey shows that in Bangladesh, 20% of children suffer from various mental disorders due to lack of recreation. Similarly, rapid pressures from parents for same activities can raise procrastination on children, which might be obstacles to learn new skills. Thus, enforcing children to succeed could be detrimental for children’s mental developments.
In conclusion, though enforcement of parents might help to gain success of children, I believe that this could be psychologically disadvantageous for them. 
It is true that  
children
 have  
overly
 enforced from the  
parents
 to achieve success in their life. There are several reasons for such approach of  
parents
, which  
on the whole
, I consider to be  
very
  negative
.
Most  
parents
 have too much concern about the  
future
 career of their offspring. They  
think
 that being a successful person will bring  
a lot of
 opportunities for  
children
.  
For example
, most  
parents
  expect
 their  
children
 would become a doctor or engineer, and they can secure  
future
 jobs.  
As a result
,  
children
 performance at school would be the main focus of  
parents
 to assess them and  
keep
 them in enormous study timetable to achieve higher exam score.  
Therefore
, the wariness of better  
future
 might lead the forcible attitude of  
parents
 to their offspring. 
However
, I would argue that the above development has harmful effects on  
children
. It can be both depressive and discouraging.  
Many
  parents
 tend to engage their  
children
  only
 for  
future
 achievements, and they omit the entertainment part of the youngsters. This could affect their mental  
wellbeing
 and cause of psychological sufferings. A recent survey  
shows
 that in Bangladesh, 20% of  
children
 suffer from various mental disorders due to lack of recreation.  
Similarly
, rapid pressures from  
parents
 for same activities can raise procrastination on  
children
, which might be obstacles to learn new  
skills
.  
Thus
, enforcing  
children
 to succeed could be detrimental for  
children’s
 mental developments. 
In conclusion
, though enforcement of  
parents
 might  
help
 to gain success of  
children
, I believe that this could be  
psychologically
 disadvantageous for them. 
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