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Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? v.1

Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? v. 1
It is true that nowadays, people across countries prefer to have a nuclear family instead of joint family. The advantage of a small family is they have the freedom to choose their lifestyle and habit without depending on others. On the other hand, a joint family gives more support in various ways. This essay will discuss about both the arguments. One of the major benefits of being a nuclear family is that, they have the flexibility to choose their way of life. They really don't have to ask or depend on anyone else for preferences. Either it can be simple item purchase or booking a car. They can run on their own way. For example, buying a car for a small family is more simple. Considering the budget and the model will be more enough. On the other hand, if it is a large family, then they need to mind about the seat capacity of the car, which in turn impact the budget factor as well and makes the choice complex. As a result, either they may end up in buying a car out of their interest or may not buy a car. On the flip side, a joint family gives more moral support which a small family can't get at any cost. A joint family, also, enhances the relationship and family bonding. It is common that most of the kids in a small family, especially in metro cities, don't even know their close relatives. For an instance, a kid in a joint family enjoys his/her vacation and festivals to the core and gain happy memories, which a kid in a nuclear family may not get. Those kids are grown without knowing the importance of relationship and family bondings. As a consequence, they can't share their feelings, even to their spouse. In conclusion, it is good to be in a small family as it will give the feel of freedom in every moment of life. However, a large family gives more moral support and cherishing memories.
It is true that nowadays,
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people
across countries prefer to have a nuclear
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family
instead
of
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joint
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family
. The advantage of a
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small
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family
is they have the freedom to choose their lifestyle and habit without depending on others.
On the other hand
, a
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joint
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family
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gives
more support in various ways. This essay will
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discuss about both
the arguments.

One of the major benefits of being a nuclear
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family
is that, they have the flexibility to choose their way of life. They
really
don't
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have to
ask or depend on anyone else for preferences. Either it can be simple item
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purchase
or booking a
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car
. They can run on their
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own
way.
For example
, buying a
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car
for a
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small
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family
is more simple. Considering the budget and the model will be more
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enough
.
On the other hand
, if it is a large
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family
, then they need to mind about the seat capacity of the
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car
, which in turn impact the budget factor
as well
and
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makes
the choice complex.
As a result
, either they may
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end
up in buying a
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car
out of their interest or may not
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buy
a car.

On the flip side, a
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joint
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family
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gives
more moral support which a
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small
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family
can't
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get
at any cost. A
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joint
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family
,
also
, enhances the relationship and
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family
bonding. It is common that most of the
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kids
in a
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small
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family
,
especially
in metro cities, don't even know their close relatives. For an instance, a
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kid
in a
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joint
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family
enjoys his/her vacation and festivals to the core and gain happy memories, which a
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kid
in a nuclear
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family
may not
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get
. Those
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kids
are grown
without knowing the importance of relationship and
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family
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bondings
. As a consequence, they can't share their feelings, even to their spouse.

In conclusion
, it is
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good
to be in a
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small
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family
as it will
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give
the feel of freedom in every moment of life.
However
, a large
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family
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gives
more moral support and cherishing memories.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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