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Nowadays, parents are allowing their children to use tablets and smartphones to enhance learning. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Nowadays, parents are allowing their children to use tablets and smartphones to enhance learning. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
In the past few years, Modern technology was accessible to society at large. Most of the parents relying on computers and smart phones to make their children learn new things. In this essay, I will discuss both merits and demerits of using digital gadgets for learning. Let’s begin by looking at the advantages of using tablets and smartphones. The Main positive is that children can easily learn from anywhere and anytime without any guidance. Apart from that, a lot of study material is available over internet, so that they can quickly find huge information about a certain topic and understand it thoroughly. Learning from these devices can improve self-learning skills and communication skills. Because of the advanced features of these devices, children can use these devices for entertainment and communication. Furthermore, playing games on smartphones, increases their mental stimulation and concentration. Turning to the other side of the argument, excessive use of electronic devices makes children devoid of physical activity. Gadgets also decreases the creativity and imagination skills of children. Another issue is that children prefer isolation and addicted to these devices. As a result, it adversely affects their interpersonal as well as social skills. These days children are suffering from eye diseases and sleeping disorders due to more screen usage of electronic gadgets. Considering both sides, we can conclude that balance is key. Although smart phones and computer having multiple benefits, reading and other physical activities are also necessary for children’s overall development. I believe, the educational benefits of using electronic devices outweigh any drawbacks
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by looking at the advantages of using tablets and smartphones. The Main
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positive
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children
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learn from anywhere and anytime without any guidance. Apart from that,
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a lot of
study material is available over internet,
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quickly
find huge information about a certain topic and understand it
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. Learning from these
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.
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,
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for entertainment and communication.
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, playing games on smartphones, increases their mental stimulation and concentration.

Turning to the other side of the argument, excessive
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use
of electronic
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devices
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children
devoid of physical activity. Gadgets
also
decreases the creativity and imagination
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skills
of
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children
. Another issue is that
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children
prefer isolation and addicted to these
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devices
.
As a result
, it
adversely
affects their interpersonal
as well
as social
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skills
. These days
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children
are suffering from eye diseases and sleeping disorders due to more screen usage of electronic gadgets.

Considering both sides, we can conclude that balance is key. Although smart phones and computer having multiple benefits, reading and other physical activities are
also
necessary for
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children’s
overall
development. I believe, the educational benefits of using electronic
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devices
outweigh any
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drawbacks
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, parents are allowing their children to use tablets and smartphones to enhance learning. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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