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it is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

it is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? v. 3
Primitive cultures will eventually be forgotten as advances in technology occurs. These two concepts do not conform with each other. In this essay, I will argue that traditonal cultures will undoubtedly be lost, as technology progresses and that they do not work well together. Life was quite difficult before mordern inventions were made. In ancient times before cars were invented, horses and camels were the means of transportation, they were the culturally acceptable ways to commute from one place to the other. However, it would take years to go from country to country, which today is not the case because of advancements in technology for example aeroplanes, jets and cars. Overtime, the aforementioned crude means of transportation have gradually been abandoned. However, does this make mordern inventions and primitive practices incompatible with one another? I believe it does because, technology is based on science which is rooted in facts. Whereas, traditional ways of life are coined from a belief in gods, the metaphysical and fortune or fate. With technology man has survived based on his ability to create whilst on the other hand culture bases man's survival on a deity or cosmic balance of sorts therefore, making this two ideas inapplicable with each other and for development to occur, there must be coherence of ideas. In conclusion, cultures of old will inevitably be lost because technology has made life so much better, that we cannot live as we did before. Also, these two are not compatible due to the fact that they are totallly different in their origin and purpose. As such, man can either let go of traditional culture and go further into the new age of technology or let reverse be the case.
Primitive
cultures
will
eventually
be forgotten
as advances in
technology
occurs. These two concepts do not conform with each
other
. In this essay, I will argue that
traditonal
cultures
will
undoubtedly
be lost
, as
technology
progresses and that they do not work well together.

Life was quite difficult
before
mordern
inventions
were made
. In ancient times
before
cars
were invented
, horses and camels were the means of transportation, they were the
culturally
acceptable ways to commute from one place to the
other
.
However
, it would take years to go from country to country, which
today
is not the case
because
of advancements in
technology
for example
aeroplanes
, jets and cars. Overtime, the aforementioned crude means of transportation have
gradually
been abandoned
.

However
, does this
make
mordern
inventions and primitive practices incompatible with one another? I believe it does
because
,
technology
is based
on science which
is rooted
in facts. Whereas, traditional ways of life
are coined
from a belief in gods, the metaphysical and fortune or fate. With
technology
man
has survived based on his ability to create whilst on the
other
hand
culture
bases
man
's survival on a deity or cosmic balance of sorts
therefore
, making this two
ideas
inapplicable with each
other
and for development to occur, there
must
be coherence of
ideas
.

In conclusion
,
cultures
of
old
will
inevitably
be lost
because
technology
has made life
so
much better, that we cannot
live
as we did
before
.
Also
, these two are not compatible due to the fact that they are
totallly
different
in their origin and purpose. As such,
man
can either
let
go of traditional
culture
and go
further
into the new age of
technology
or
let
reverse be the case.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay it is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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