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Nowadays on-line shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? v.1

Nowadays on-line shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? v. 1
Recently, the number of people who purchases various products and services online is increasing more than ever before. This has certainly affected the business of shopping centres to a great extent. However, I consider this development as positive, due to a number of reasons. To begin with, e-shopping is generally considered to be more convenient for customers than in-store purchasing. Perhaps, this is because, many people, nowadays, are unable to find adequate time to go shopping as they are too busy with professional or personal responsibilities. For example, virtual shopping websites such as, eBay and Amazon provide a wide range of products online, which cater to the needs of individuals from the comfort of their home. Moreover, such shopping sites have considerably reduced major inconveniences associated with shopping, like travelling to distant shops, parking vehicles in crowded cities and spending a considerable amount of time. Furthermore, online shopping allows people to select from a wide range of products, and the prices and features of products are often compared. This has enabled customers to choose the right products that suit their needs. For instance, popular online shops in India, namely Flipkart and Jabong have not only provided detailed information of their products on sale, but also customers' opinions and reviews on their product experience. Besides, placed orders on these websites can be altered or cancelled by customers, and purchased products can also be returned if they do not meet the assured quality. Shopping, however, is a social experience for certain people and many of them enjoy shopping as leisure or entertainment. But, popular shopping websites often compete with stores with lower prices and discount sales. This has also influenced many people to purchase products online. In conclusion, online shopping offers greater benefits to customers when compared to in-store purchasing. Clearly, while it converts shopping into a hassle free experience, shopping over the internet is increasingly convenient, too. Therefore, I think this is definitely a positive trend and the popularity of online shopping is likely to continue.
Recently, the number of
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people
who
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products
and services
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online
is increasing more than ever
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before
. This has
certainly
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affected
the business of
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shopping
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centres
to a great extent.
However
, I consider this development as
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positive
, due to a number of reasons.

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begin
with, e-shopping is
generally
considered to be more convenient for
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customers
than in-store purchasing. Perhaps, this is
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because
,
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many
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people
, nowadays, are unable to find adequate time to go
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shopping
as they are too busy with professional or personal responsibilities.
For example
, virtual
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shopping
websites such as, eBay and Amazon provide a wide range of
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products
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online
, which cater to the needs of individuals from the comfort of their home.
Moreover
, such
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shopping
sites have
considerably
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reduced
major inconveniences associated with
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shopping
, like travelling to distant shops, parking vehicles in crowded cities and spending a considerable amount of time.

Furthermore
,
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online
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shopping
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allows
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people
to select from a wide range of
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products
, and the prices and features of
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products
are
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often
compared. This has enabled
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customers
to choose the right
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products
that suit their needs.
For instance
, popular
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online
shops in India,
namely
Flipkart and
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Jabong
have not
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only
provided detailed information of their
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products
on sale,
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but
also
customers' opinions and reviews on their
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product
experience.
Besides
, placed orders on these websites can
be altered
or cancelled by
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customers
, and
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purchased
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products
can
also
be returned
if they do not
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meet
the assured quality.

Shopping,
however
, is a social experience for certain
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people
and
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many
of them enjoy
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shopping
as leisure or entertainment.
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But
, popular
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shopping
websites
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often
compete with stores with lower prices and discount sales. This has
also
influenced
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many
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people
to
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purchase
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products
online.

In conclusion
,
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online
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shopping
offers greater benefits to
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customers
when compared to in-store purchasing.
Clearly
, while it converts
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shopping
into a hassle free experience,
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shopping
over the internet is
increasingly
convenient, too.
Therefore
, I
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think
this is definitely a
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positive
trend and the popularity of
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online
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shopping
is likely to continue.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays on-line shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
335 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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