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Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your reasons and examples. v.2

Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your reasons and examples. v. 2
Now that we can buy just about anything with a few mouse clicks from the comfort of our home, very few people actually feel the need to venture into brick and mortar stores. There is no denying the fact that online shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. This trend has both positive and negative aspects. The huge popularity of online shopping can be attributed to the fact that it makes shopping easier. It saves both time and money. Buyers no longer have to drive all the way to shops to buy things. Also, online stores tend to offer attractive prices probably because they have lower overhead costs. This allows them to sell items for deeply discounted prices. This can lead to major cost benefits for shoppers. In addition, online shopping makes it easy to buy things from any part of the world. Even if an item is not available in your country, you can buy it from online stores. Online shopping also allows you to compare prices before hitting the purchase button. On the flip side, the ease of online shopping has made many people compulsive shoppers. Most of us spend lots of time on the internet every day. And while we are on the internet, we get bombarded with numerous advertisements. For a compulsive shopper, this is a good reason to splurge. The fact that online shopping encourages us to buy things that we do not need or use cannot be denied. This can lead to debts. Also, there are security concerns. When you buy things online, you run a small risk of getting your financial information exploited by hackers. Of course, good anti-virus and anti-malware programs can offer a great deal of protection. But almost every week, we hear about data breaches at major online retailers. To conclude, online shopping has several advantages and disadvantages. However, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Of course, the shopper has to exercise some common sense and keep their device free of malware if they want to enjoy the benefits of online shopping.
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about anything with a few mouse clicks from the comfort of our home,
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few
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people
actually feel the need to venture into brick and mortar stores. There is no denying the fact that
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online
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shopping
has become more popular than in-store
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shopping
. This trend has both
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positive
and
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negative
aspects.

The huge popularity of
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online
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shopping
can
be attributed
to the fact that it
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makes
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shopping
easier. It saves both time and money. Buyers no longer
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have to
drive all the way to shops to
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buy
things.
Also
,
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online
stores tend to offer attractive prices
probably
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because
they have lower overhead costs. This
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allows
them to sell items for
deeply
discounted prices. This can lead to major cost benefits for
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shoppers
.
In addition
,
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online
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shopping
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makes
it easy to
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buy
things from any part of the world. Even if an item is not available in your country, you can
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buy
it from
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online
stores.
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also
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allows
you to compare prices
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before
hitting the
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purchase
button.

On the flip side, the
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ease
of
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online
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has made
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compulsive
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shoppers
. Most of us spend lots of time on the internet every day. And while we are on the internet, we
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get
bombarded with numerous advertisements. For a compulsive
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, this is a
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good
reason to splurge. The fact that
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online
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shopping
encourages us to
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buy
things that we do not need or
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use
cannot
be denied
. This can lead to debts.
Also
, there are security concerns. When you
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buy
things
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online
, you run a
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small
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risk
of getting your financial information exploited by hackers.
Of course
,
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good
anti-virus and anti-malware programs can offer a great deal of protection.
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But
almost every week, we hear about data breaches at major
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retailers.

To conclude
,
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shopping
has several advantages and disadvantages.
However
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Of course
, the
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has to
exercise
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common sense and
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their device free of malware if they want to enjoy the benefits of
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online
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shopping
.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your reasons and examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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