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Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.4

Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding. with this statement? v. 4
These days, news providers such as television channels, online news portals and newspapers are investing a lot in covering international news, and little focus is given to local news. However, I believe that local news also essential for society because it can inform the latest news close to the civil. Firstly, invest a lot of money for conveying some reports for covering international news is required. Besides, communities, especially businessman rely on information from the media. For instance, if the war takes place in the Middle East, oil prices can increase and it can make a good price ascent. Therefore, news, company report is waiting by humans. On the other hand, issue some money for regions also crucial because most of the humans in a district have lacked information. To illustrate, people must know the forecast weather before they go to their office and them necessary to anticipate the bad condition. Moreover, the public also needs the latest brief especially from crime and natural disasters. This report can make people change the route when they are going to someplace and it also can prevent undesirable things. For example, I always elude the insecure areas, primarily if the areas have a high criminality rate and have a natural disaster like fallen trees. In conclusion, invest a lot of money for covering international news is vital. However, I tend to agree if local news gets higher attention because most of the residents must know the complete information especially if it can affect their activity
These days,
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news
providers such as television channels, online
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news
portals and newspapers are investing a lot in covering international
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news
, and
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little
focus is
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given
to local
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news
.
However
, I believe that local
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news
also
essential for society
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because
it can inform the latest
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news
close to the civil.

Firstly
, invest
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a lot of
money for conveying
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some
reports for covering international
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news
is required
.
Besides
, communities,
especially
businessman rely on information from the media.
For instance
, if the war takes place in the Middle East, oil prices can increase and it can
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make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
price ascent.
Therefore
,
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news
,
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company
report is waiting by humans.

On the other hand
, issue
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some
money for regions
also
crucial
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because
most of the humans in a district have lacked information. To illustrate,
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people
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must
know the forecast weather
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before
they go to their office and them necessary to anticipate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
condition.
Moreover
, the public
also
needs the latest brief
especially
from crime and natural disasters. This report can
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make
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the route when they are going to someplace and it
also
can
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prevent
undesirable things.
For example
, I always elude the insecure areas,
primarily
if the areas have a high criminality rate and have a natural disaster like fallen trees.

In conclusion
, invest
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a lot of
money for covering international
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news
is vital.
However
, I tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
if local
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news
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
higher attention
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because
most of the residents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
know the complete information
especially
if it can affect their activity
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding. with this statement? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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