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Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it. v.1

Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it. v. 1
In the modern times, many big cities have a large number of computer and road traffic problems. This essay will discuss a couple possible reasons for this issue, and their solution as well. One of the possible reasons for this issue is the high number of cars in the streets. Big cities tend to have a large population, in addition to this, the progress of the economy made cars more accessible to buy, because of this more and more cars is on the streets, causing an overflow of vehicles and resulting in congestion and traffic. A possible solution for this matter is to incentive the use of public transport, as buses and trains, this can be achieved by lowering the price of these services, and guarantee that they are functioning properly. Another problem could be that the highways, road and streets are not as efficient, in making the traffic flow, as they could be. How these roads were designed, the occasional reforms that happen, too many traffic lights and other factors, could be harming the flow of the vehicles, resulting in the seen problems. A solution is to find problematic problems, and build new routes or roads connecting to this spot, increase the speed limit, or making larger roads. To conclude, congestions and road traffic can be caused by the large number of cars and the inefficiency of the roads, nevertheless these issues could be fixed with encouraging the use of public transport and redesigning the routes. It is important to solve this issue, to avoid the stress of the drivers and possible accidents.
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, and their solution
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One of the
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reasons for this
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is the high number of
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cars
in the streets.
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Big
cities tend to have a large population,
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to this, the progress of the economy made
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cars
more accessible to
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,
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more and more
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cars
is on the streets, causing an overflow of vehicles and resulting in congestion and
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. A
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possible
solution for this matter is to incentive the
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use
of public transport, as buses and trains, this can
be achieved
by lowering the price of these services, and guarantee that they are functioning
properly
.

Another
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problem
could be that the highways,
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road
and streets are not as efficient, in making the
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traffic
flow, as they could be. How these
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roads
were designed
, the occasional reforms that happen, too
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traffic
lights and other factors, could be harming the flow of the vehicles, resulting in the
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seen
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. A solution is to find problematic
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problems
, and build new routes or
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roads
connecting to this spot, increase the speed limit, or making larger roads.

To conclude
, congestions and
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road
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traffic
can
be caused
by the large number of
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cars
and the inefficiency of the
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,
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these
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issues
could be
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fixed
with encouraging the
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use
of public transport and redesigning the routes. It is
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important
to solve this
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issue
, to avoid the
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stress
of the drivers and
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accidents.
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IELTS essay Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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