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Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it. v.2

Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it. v. 2
There is no doubt that traffic congestion has become problemsome. These days several large cities are highly congested and road traffic problems have significantly increased as well. This essay will discuss the causes of this phenomenon as well as suggesting some useful solutions to curb this problem. Discussing the causes, the most prevailing ones are cheap cars which are affordable to the majority and the issue of many unlicensed drivers on the road. To elaborate, buying a car these days is cheaper than it used to be in the past, hence 75% of city dwellers are car owners, thus causing congestion in the road. For instance, nowadays people are allowed to take a car on credit and pay in instalments unlike in the past. In addition, there is the issue of individuals who drive without licences, this will result in accidents as well as they are not well versed with road rules which should be observed. For example, an unlicensed driver may enter a red robot, thus causing havoc on the road. However, these problems can be solved by government intervention in controlling vehicle imports and allow only one car per family. This is because if the government regulate the number of cars that are imported from other countries by charging exorbitant taxes, the number of cars that are on the road will reduce considerably, as a result road traffic issues will also be reduced. Moreover, the state can impose a law that one car should be registered per family to ease conestion. For example, a family of five will only have one car, thus traffic jam is reduced by four cars. In conclusion, traffic jam and road problems are owing to cheap vehicle imports and an increased number of unlawful drivers. However, these can be counteracted by government action in controlling car imports.
There is no doubt that
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traffic
congestion has become
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problemsome
. These days several large cities are
highly
congested and
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road
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traffic
problems have
significantly
increased as
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well
. This essay will discuss the causes of this phenomenon as
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well
as suggesting
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some
useful solutions to curb this problem.

Discussing the causes, the most prevailing ones are
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cheap
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cars
which are affordable to the majority and the issue of
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many
unlicensed drivers on the
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road
. To elaborate, buying a
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car
these days is cheaper than it
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used
to be in the past,
hence
75% of city dwellers are
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car
owners,
thus
causing congestion in the
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road
.
For instance
, nowadays
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people
are
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allowed
to take a
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car
on credit and pay in
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instalments
unlike in the past.
In addition
, there is the issue of individuals who drive without
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licences
, this will result in accidents as
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well
as they are not
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well
versed with
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road
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rules
which should
be observed
.
For example
, an unlicensed driver may enter a red robot,
thus
causing havoc on the road.

However
, these problems can
be solved
by
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government
intervention in controlling vehicle imports and
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allow
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only
one
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car
per family. This is
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because
if the
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government
regulate the number of
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cars
that
are imported
from other countries by charging exorbitant taxes, the number of
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cars
that are on the
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road
will
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reduce
considerably
,
as a result
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road
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traffic
issues will
also
be
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reduced
.
Moreover
, the state can impose a law that one
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car
should
be registered
per family to
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ease
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conestion
.
For example
, a family of five will
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only
have one
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car
,
thus
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traffic
jam is
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reduced
by four cars.

In conclusion
,
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traffic
jam and
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road
problems are owing to
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cheap
vehicle imports and an increased number of unlawful drivers.
However
, these can
be counteracted
by
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government
action in controlling
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car
imports.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays most big cities have high congestion and rood traffic issues. What are the real causes for this? Suggest a solution that will help to relieve it. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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