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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? v.9

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 9
It has been argued that the choice of an individual depicts one's social background and personality. However, I completely disagree with this notion as numerous facts are out there where an individual appear to be different whereas their interest in dresses are different. Firstly, this essay will discuss that how matured people select their cloths and appear different from their original personality. Secondly, this essay will shadow light on how surrounding and social relation alter their interest. To commence, It has been noticed in among of a younger generation that they begin to quick guess about an individual background and their character by just looking their dressing sense, whereas they entirely put aside the matureness fact. People who have achieved the older age keep the vast experience of life along with nature to adopt a new culture. Moreover, with the time they learn the advantages of simplicity. So it becomes beyond bounds of possibility to guess their social background and character. For instance, there was in the event took place with the great scientist of India Dr. APJ Kalam, in a market he was appeared to be an old man shopping some gift for kids until his identity was not revealed by one of fan of him. Secondly, Impact of one's surroundings and social relation modify the interest of people, in spite of where to belong to. India is a country with diverse religions and, on the other hand, it is secular also. People from one region move to another part of country for their bread and butter. They acquire and get accustomed to a new life. For example, one is shifted to Canada from India and adopted the condition there. To face the weather there he need to obtain a new dressing sense which nowhere reveals their culture and character. Considering all facts discussed above, I am in a better state to say that dressing sense does not depict the individual background and character. Choices tend to be change in contrast of geography, knowledge, trending fashion, atmosphere and other significant factors.
It has
been argued
that the choice of an
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individual
depicts one's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
background
and personality.
However
, I completely disagree with this notion as numerous facts are out there where an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
appear to be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
whereas their interest in dresses are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss that how matured
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
select their cloths and appear
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
from their original personality.
Secondly
, this essay will shadow light on how surrounding and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
relation alter their interest.

To commence, It has
been noticed
in among of a younger generation that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
to quick guess about an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
background
and their character by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
looking their dressing sense, whereas they
entirely
put aside the
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matureness
fact.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
who have achieved the older age
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the vast experience of life along with nature to adopt a new culture.
Moreover
, with the time they learn the advantages of simplicity.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it becomes beyond bounds of possibility to guess their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
background
and character.
For instance
, there was in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
took place with the great scientist of India Dr. APJ
Possible spelling mistake found.
Kalam
, in a market he
was appeared
to be an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
shopping
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
gift for kids until his identity was not revealed by one of fan of him.

Secondly
, Impact of one's surroundings and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
relation modify the interest of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
in spite of
where to belong to. India is a country with diverse religions and,
on the other hand
, it is secular
also
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
from one region
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to another part of country for their bread and butter. They acquire and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
accustomed to a new life.
For example
, one
is shifted
to Canada from India and adopted the condition there. To face the weather there he need to obtain a new dressing sense which nowhere reveals their culture and character.

Considering all facts discussed above, I am in a better state to say that dressing sense does not depict the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
background
and character. Choices tend to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in contrast
of geography, knowledge, trending fashion, atmosphere and other significant factors.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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