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Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society? v.1

Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society? v. 1
The lifestyle of people represents the cultural and traditional norms of a society. The way we socialise, eat, live and behave becomes the trend which is followed by other members of a society. These footprints sometimes result in the destruction of moral values of a community. Recently, it is observed that the number of people preferring to live independently is gradually rising which is alarming as this will have a negative impact on society. This essay will analyse reasons for this and its impact on the society. Family relations and moral values are the foundations of a reputable society. People opt to live independently because they want to live and lead a free life away from the family restrictions, regulations and norms. They say that their physiology doesn't match with other members of a family and living with them is a mental torture. For instance, children in Asian countries enjoy less freedom than that of West; once they grow up they develop the desire to live alone and autonomous life. Not all of it is associated with the family environment, few people working abroad prefers to live alone or with friends. They believe that this way they can save more and send the same to their families back home. For instance, in UAE, private accommodation cost is more than the average salary of a worker. Living alone not only affects the person in general but its effects on society are adverse. People living alone suffer from homesickness, they do not want to share their feelings and emotions with others which might result in mental disorders or damage their personality. Their families suffer back home when they need them physically in case of events, gathering or medical emergencies. Children preferring to live alone or with friends are unable to learn the moral lessons or acquire virtuous deeds preached by their parents or guardians. These values are the pillars of a society. Moreover, they don't share the responsibility of the parents, siblings or take part in household stuff which throws the burden on other members of a family. To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible arguments that highlighted myriad reasons of living independently and its impact on society. People opting to live private and self-governing life often trade their happiness and comfort with the emotions and feelings associated with the combined family system.
The lifestyle of
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people
represents the cultural and traditional norms of a
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society
. The way we
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socialise
, eat,
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live
and behave becomes the trend which
is followed
by
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other
members of a
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society
. These footprints
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sometimes
result in the destruction of moral values of a community. Recently, it
is observed
that the number of
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people
preferring to
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live
independently
is
gradually
rising which is alarming as this will have a
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negative
impact on
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society
. This essay will
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analyse
reasons for this and its impact on the society.

Family relations and moral values are the foundations of a reputable
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society
.
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People
opt to
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live
independently
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because
they want to
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live
and lead a free life away from the
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family
restrictions, regulations and norms. They say that their physiology doesn't match with
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other
members of a
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family
and living with them is a mental torture.
For instance
, children in Asian countries enjoy less freedom than that of West; once they grow up they develop the desire to
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live
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alone
and autonomous life. Not all of it
is associated
with the
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family
environment, few
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people
working abroad prefers to
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live
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alone
or with friends. They believe that this way they can save more and
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send
the same to their
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families
back home.
For instance
,
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in UAE
, private accommodation cost is more than the average salary of a worker.

Living
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alone
not
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only
affects the person
in general
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but
its effects on
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society
are adverse.
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People
living
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alone
suffer from homesickness, they do not want to share their feelings and emotions with others which might result in mental disorders or damage their personality. Their
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families
suffer back home when they need them
physically
in case of
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events
, gathering or medical emergencies. Children preferring to
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live
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alone
or with friends are unable to learn the moral lessons or acquire virtuous deeds preached by their parents or guardians. These values are the pillars of a
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society
.
Moreover
, they don't share the responsibility of the parents, siblings or
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take part
in household stuff which throws the burden on
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other
members of a family.

To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible arguments that highlighted myriad reasons of living
independently
and its impact on
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society
.
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People
opting to
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live
private and self-governing life
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often
trade their happiness and comfort with the emotions and feelings associated with the combined
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family
system.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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