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Nowadays many people prefer to study or live in foreign countries. While studying and living abroad brings many benefits to individuals, it also has a number of disadvantages. What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad? v.1

Nowadays many people prefer to study or live in foreign countries. While studying and living abroad brings many benefits to individuals, it also has a number of disadvantages. What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad? v. 1
Many people emigrate from their native countries nowadays. It has been a gradually increasing trend, as plenty of perspective students as well as ordinary workers leave their homelands hoping to become more successful. However, they usually have to separate from families and leave their places of residence. In this essay will be discussed the advantages and disadvantages of living and studying abroad. To begin with, there are some considerable pros. Firstly, the youth can study in foreign universities in order to become prosperous specialists, which is not a trivial goal to achieve in the native country. For instance, some of the best Lithuanian pupils choose to study at University of Cambridge because it is considered to be one of the top universities in the world in terms of the quality of education. Secondly, adults also migrate abroad if they want to earn more money and to have better career opportunities. For example, the minimum salary in the UK is around 1000 pounds, while in Lithuania it is 300 Euros. Therefore, people can afford to satisfy their needs better living in wealthy foreign countries. By contrast, there some cons too. To begin with, leaving the homeland usually means damaging relationships with other people. In my personal experience, after my cousins left the country they have not been socialising so much with their parents, although they have kept in touch with them. Additionally, when a person owns a flat or a house, he should continue to pay taxes even if he leaves the place of residence and lives abroad. Thus, noteworthy is the fact that one can miss relatives, and leaving home can be unpleasant sometimes. In conclusion, it can be seen that something should be sacrificed due to the seeking of a better life. However, it is generally advantageous to take the challenge of living in a foreign country to become a successful person, being it education or work. It is hoped that all countries in the future will be able to provide its citizens equal opportunities to achieve their life goals.
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emigrate from their native
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nowadays. It has been a
gradually
increasing trend, as
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plenty
of perspective students
as well
as ordinary workers
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leave
their homelands hoping to become more successful.
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usually
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have to
separate from families and
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leave
their places of residence. In this essay will
be discussed
the advantages and disadvantages of living and studying abroad.

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begin
with, there are
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some
considerable pros.
Firstly
, the youth can study in foreign universities in order to become prosperous specialists, which is not a trivial goal to achieve in the native
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country
.
For instance
,
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some
of the best Lithuanian pupils choose to study at University of Cambridge
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because
it
is considered
to be one of the top universities in the world in terms of the quality of education.
Secondly
, adults
also
migrate abroad if they want to earn more money and to have better career opportunities.
For example
, the minimum salary in the UK is around
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1000 pounds
, while in Lithuania it is 300 Euros.
Therefore
,
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people
can afford to satisfy their needs better living in wealthy foreign countries.

By contrast, there
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some
cons too. To
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begin
with, leaving the homeland
usually
means damaging relationships with other
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people
. In my personal experience, after my cousins
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left
the
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country
they have not been
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socialising
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so
much with their parents, although they have
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kept
in touch with them.
Additionally
, when a person
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owns
a flat or a
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house
, he should continue to pay taxes even if he
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leaves
the place of residence and
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lives
abroad.
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sometimes
.

In conclusion
, it can be
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seen
that something should
be sacrificed
due to the seeking of a better life.
However
, it is
generally
advantageous to take the challenge of living in a foreign
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country
to become a successful person, being it education or work. It
is hoped
that all
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countries
in the future will be able to provide its citizens equal opportunities to achieve their life goals.
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people prefer to study or live in foreign countries. While studying and living abroad brings many benefits to individuals, it also has a number of disadvantages. What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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