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nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in their life. what are the reasons? do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v.6

nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in their life. what are the reasons? do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 6
In recent years, people believe that traveling to explore different cultures can be replaced with the usual Internet. Although I believe that studying through the Internet cannot be an alternative to the traditional solution, but I also support that in some cases the Internet can help out. To begin with, it is worth noting that studying the culture of different countries through the magic of progress (the Internet) can be an excellent assistant and has most of the advantages. First, in emergency situations, this replacement is more effective. In other words, provided that a person wants to study the culture of a remote country or at a time when it is impossible to travel. Even if, with the help of travels, the brain perceives information in a different way, thanks to visualization, but when the country is isolated, there is no other choice but to study via the Internet. To illustrate, in compliance with the position of North Korea, the country is completely isolated and there are no flights and the Internet offers an opportunity to study the culture of this country. The second important factor is saving money, because in order to study the country's culture live, a person must work tirelessly for a very long time and he will spend the money earned in a week or a month. As a result, the development of modern technologies such as the Internet can easily introduce a person to different cultures. On the other hand, despite the enormous opportunity that the Internet ensures for exploring other cultures, this does not negate the importance of travel. The most important reason is sensation, because with the help of visualization, emotions and one’s own experience, a person gains more knowledge. Although, when studying culture, people can see a photograph of the Louvre on the Internet, but sometimes the little butterfly that lives in France is remembered much more than a magnificent photograph of the Louvre. For instance, by adhering to research at Harvard University, information is absorbed much faster and remains for a long time in a person’s memory when he sees and gains experience. Another aspect is cultural shock. Therefore, in traditional pool, many tourists often feel a certain barrier when they travel to another country and even if they know everything in this culture, they experience difficulties. Thus, the importance of travel lies in ordinary truths like sensation and experience. In conclusion, according to many people, it is now easy to sit on the couch to study various cultures via the Internet without requiring travel. But I believe that each method of teaching culture has a unique look and can provide different experiences
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countries
through the magic of progress (the Internet) can be an excellent assistant and has most of the advantages.
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culture
of a remote
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or at a time when it is impossible to
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via the Internet. To illustrate, in compliance with the position of North Korea, the
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is completely isolated and there are no flights and the Internet offers an opportunity to
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culture
of this
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time and
he will spend the money earned in a week or a month.
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, the development of modern technologies such as the Internet can
easily
introduce a
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to
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hand, despite the enormous opportunity that the Internet ensures for exploring
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cultures
, this does not negate the importance of
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. The most
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reason is sensation,
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with the
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of visualization, emotions and one’s
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own
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experience
, a
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gains more knowledge. Although, when studying
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,
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a photograph of the Louvre on the Internet,
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much more than a magnificent photograph of the Louvre.
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much faster and remains for a long time in a
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person’s
memory when he
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sees
and gains
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. Another aspect is cultural shock.
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tourists
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feel a certain barrier when they
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and even if they know everything in this
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, they
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difficulties.
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, the importance of
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lies in ordinary truths like sensation and experience.

In conclusion
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via the Internet without requiring
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.
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culture
has a unique look and can provide
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experiences
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Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in their life. what are the reasons? do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
441 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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