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Nowadays, more and more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v.1

Nowadays, more and more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 1
Scientific research is a hotly-debate topic that often divides opinion. It is thought to be managed and funded by authorities instead of private institutions. To a certain extent, I agree that the government is responsible for research projects. However, I believe that these activities should also be conducted by private organizations. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument. On the one hand, there are some benefits of governments taking care of scientific research. To start with, the government is capable of providing financial assistance to various research projects, as governments of different countries can collaborate together. For instance, they can carry out research into ways of dealing with greenhouse effect. Unlike private companies, governments tend to pay more attention to research fields that can benefit society as a whole. Studies related to environmental issues or crime rates are great examples. Furthermore, if the project fails to achieve its objectives, the government has the resources to cope up with the losses incurred. On the contrary, companies usually only amplify profits rather than giving a hand to all citizens. A scientific project which is organized and handled by private companies, would deteriorate its reliability. Without government control, some companies could carry out illegal research like destructive, biochemical weapons, and it could pose a bad consequence to society, even threaten the world peace. It is the governments’ job to prevent and block these kinds of research. On the other hand, I believe that private companies should also share the responsibility to conduct scientific research. The first advantage is that this could help to ease the pressure on the national budget. As a result, citizens would have to pay lower taxes, and the authorities would also have more cash to spend on other important fields such as education or the military. Since the top priority of companies is to earn money, they would have more motivation to conduct research more quickly and effectively. Without sufficient funding, many important scientific projects would be abandoned, impact adversely on the development of any nation. In addition, the scope of scientific research is diverse and wide, and private companies could cover up some research which is not controlled by the authorities. On top of that, when the funding comes from the same organization, the results could also be biased to ensure there is a favourable outcome to the funding institution. Weighing up both sides of the argument, private companies need to be given their own freedom in doing research, but with adequate and appropriate monitoring from the government.
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thought
to
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private
institutions. To a certain extent, I
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government
is responsible for
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.
However
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private
organizations. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.

On the one hand, there are
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some
benefits of
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governments
taking care of
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scientific
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. To
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start
with, the
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government
is capable of providing financial assistance to various
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projects
, as
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governments
of
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different
countries can collaborate together.
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, they can carry out
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research
into ways of dealing with greenhouse effect. Unlike
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private
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companies
,
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governments
tend to pay more attention to
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research
fields that can benefit society as a whole. Studies related to environmental issues or crime rates are great examples.
Furthermore
, if the
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project
fails to achieve its objectives, the
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government
has the resources to cope up with the losses incurred.
On the contrary
,
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companies
usually
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only
amplify profits
rather
than giving a hand to all citizens. A
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scientific
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project
which
is organized
and handled by
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private
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companies
, would deteriorate its reliability. Without
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government
control,
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some
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companies
could carry out illegal
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research
like destructive, biochemical weapons, and it could pose a
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bad
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society, even threaten the world peace. It is the
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governments’
job to
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prevent
and block these kinds of research.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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private
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companies
should
also
share the responsibility to conduct
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scientific
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. The
first
advantage is that this could
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help
to
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the pressure on the national budget.
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have to
pay lower taxes, and the authorities would
also
have more cash to spend on other
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important
fields such as education or the military. Since the top priority of
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companies
is to earn money, they would have more motivation to conduct
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research
more
quickly
and
effectively
. Without sufficient funding,
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many
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important
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would
be abandoned
, impact
adversely
on the development of any nation.
In addition
, the scope of
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scientific
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research
is diverse and wide, and
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private
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companies
could cover up
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some
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research
which is not controlled by the authorities.
On top of that
, when the funding
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comes
from the same organization, the results could
also
be biased
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favourable
outcome to the funding institution.

Weighing up both sides of the argument,
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private
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companies
need to be
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given
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,
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government
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
425 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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