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do you agree or disagree? young people now days dont give enough time to helping their community. +toefl essay v.200

young people now days dont give enough time to helping their community. +toefl essay v. 200
In the modern society, junior citizenships are make important part of society. They have crucial rule for improve and assist of their community. Whether or not in this age juniors spend proper time and energy for having better community and support their citizens is controversial. I believe that young people pay out suitable time for society because of two reasons: first, they are spending time for studding and secondly, they can help another people. As began with, most people who have range age between 18 until 30 years' old consume sufficient duration for improve their society. Since young people spend most time for studding and searching, they can help to improve their society. Therefore, when students who are spending most time in university, they are not only learning new science but also trying solve some problem which they find in the society with doing special project. To shed light on the affirmation discussion, we can assume master students at university. Major duty of master student is doing special project which it is considered major problem and issue. Hence, they have obligation work to problem 2 or 3 years in order to find scientific and operational solution. They must study carefully, search accurate and examine advertent to find advantage solution. Secondly, young citizenships have many ways to help their society such as helping another people. If young humans assist another people like poor citizenry, they would improve humanitarian sense in community. Furthermore, owing to helping penniless, junior citizenships can increase indigence in their city where they live. Also, aid to poor people not only means give them amount of currency but also means free education. To illustrate what was mentioned further, some young people who are teaching in school go to reigns which these areas are underprivileged and teach to the children without give money from them. Therefore, this young people give enough time to improve their society. In addition to, some young doctors cure poor people without give any price from them so that they can improve health of citizens. All things considered, in this era I believe that youth persons provide abundant times for aid their society. They have many ways to assist fore improve and better citizen. One of them is at university, they are trying solve important crucial issues of their society. Another way is, they can help poor people in many ways like afford to free education and cure. All of these ways are done by young people who spend enough time for their society.
In the modern
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society
, junior
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citizenships
are
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make
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important
part of
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society
. They have crucial
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rule
for
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improve
and assist of their community.
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Whether or not
in this age juniors spend proper
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time
and energy for having better community and support their citizens is controversial. I believe that
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young
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people
pay out suitable
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time
for
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society
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because
of two reasons:
first
, they are spending
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time
for studding and
secondly
, they can
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help
another
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people
.

As began with, most
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people
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who
have range age between 18 until 30
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years&
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old
consume sufficient duration for
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improve
their
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society
. Since
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young
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people
spend most
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time
for studding and searching, they can
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help
to
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improve
their
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society
.
Therefore
, when students
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who
are spending most
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time
in university, they are not
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only
learning new science
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but
also
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trying solve
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some
problem which they find in the
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society
with doing special project. To shed light on the affirmation discussion, we can assume master students at university. Major duty of master student is doing special project which it
is considered
major problem and issue.
Hence
, they have obligation work to problem 2 or 3 years in order to find scientific and operational solution. They
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must
study
carefully
, search accurate and examine
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advertent
to find advantage solution.

Secondly
,
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young
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citizenships have
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many
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ways
to
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help
their
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society
such as helping another
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people
. If
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young
humans assist another
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people
like
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poor
citizenry, they would
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improve
humanitarian sense in community.
Furthermore
, owing to helping penniless, junior
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citizenships can
increase indigence in their city where they
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live
.
Also
, aid to
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poor
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people
not
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only
means
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give
them amount of currency
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but
also
means free education. To illustrate what
was mentioned
further
,
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some
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young
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people
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who
are teaching in school go to reigns which these areas
are underprivileged
and teach to the children without
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give
money from them.
Therefore
, this
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young
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people
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give
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enough
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time
to
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improve
their
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society
.
In addition
to,
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some
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young
doctors cure
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poor
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people
without
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give
any price from them
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so
that they can
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improve
health of citizens.

All things considered, in this era I believe that youth persons provide abundant
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times
for aid their
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society
. They have
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many
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ways
to assist fore
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improve
and better citizen. One of them is at university, they are
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trying solve
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important
crucial issues of their
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society
. Another
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way
is, they can
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help
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poor
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people
in
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many
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ways
like afford to free education and cure. All of these
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ways
are done
by
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young
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people
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who
spend
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enough
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time
for their
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society
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay young people now days dont give enough time to helping their community. +toefl essay v. 200

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
419 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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