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Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. v.7

Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. v. 7
Technology has revolutionised the way human beings go about their daily life. This is evident from the fact that many people nowadays work from the comfort of their homes. Some argue that this practice brings with its myriad of benefits, while others refute this. Both sides of this debate will be analysed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is reached. On the one hand, working from home can save an employer office rental costs to a great degree. For example, Sydney, Australia is one such place where the costs of renting an office space have risen to exorbitant levels in the past few decades. As a result, a large proportion of employers’ funds have to be devoted to this area, and this encumbers their ability to earn a decent profit. When looking at the discussion in this light, the merits of working from one’s home are clearly seen. On the other hand, many contend that drawbacks of working from home outweigh its benefits. For instance, a recent British study found that majority of the people working from home had trouble meeting deadlines that were set by their organisations. This habitual lateness can lead to failure to the achievement of organisational goals. Thus, it is obvious why many people do not support the notion of working from home. After pondering upon both sides of this argument, it is felt that working from home is much more of a positive development than negative. It is thus hoped that people and organisations will continue to reap the bounties of working from home into the foreseeable future.
Technology has
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revolutionised
the way human beings go about their daily life. This is evident from the fact that
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many
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people
nowadays work from the comfort of their
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homes
.
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Some
argue that this practice brings with its myriad of benefits, while others refute this. Both sides of this debate will be
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analysed
in this essay
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before
a reasoned conclusion
is reached
.

On the one hand,
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working
from home can save an employer office rental costs to a great degree.
For example
, Sydney, Australia is one such place where the costs of renting an office space have risen to exorbitant levels in the past few decades.
As a result
, a large proportion of employers’ funds
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have to
be devoted
to this area, and this encumbers their ability to earn a decent profit. When looking at the discussion in this light, the merits of
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working
from one’s home
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are
clearly
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seen
.

On the other hand
,
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many
contend that drawbacks of
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working
from home outweigh its benefits.
For instance
, a recent British study found that majority of the
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people
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working
from home had trouble meeting deadlines that
were set
by their
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organisations
. This habitual lateness can lead to failure to the achievement of
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organisational
goals.
Thus
, it is obvious why
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many
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people
do not support the notion of
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working
from home.

After pondering upon both sides of this argument, it
is felt
that
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working
from home is much more of a
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positive
development than
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negative
. It is
thus
hoped that
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people
and
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organisations
will continue to reap the bounties of
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working
from home into the foreseeable future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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