These days, people argue that providing the facilities for physical activity is the best option to enhance their fitness but other side claims that it has very little impact and also different point of views should be outweighed considering public health status. In this essay, I will elaborate the topic into several discussions underneath.
Nowadays, in their daily routine sedentary people is not include their working days and leisure time for physical activity. Because they tend to use all their time to focus on the important thing related to their job, family and the other. Lacking time and facilities could be the reason to alter their mood to conduct the sports session. But the condition not will be the same if several facilities are well-fulfilled in society. For example, the government can build the cheap access to a park so the people could easily reach them.
However, to focus on sports interests is not universal. Some people are already adapt their lifestyle to exercise. So, promoting sports facilities would not greatly influence their behaviour. Because to do sports activity, someone should understand how to do in proper ways.
As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food products, tobacco and alcohol. The reason is reliance on their daily habitual, to do so, could decrease the consumer. This obviously will lead to influences statistics level on public health.
By way of conclusion, I think people should think differently and focus on sports. It is should be understood that governments should also encourage people from many aspects.
These days,
people
argue that providing the facilities for physical
activity
is the best option to enhance their fitness
but
other side claims that it has
very
little
impact and
also
different
point of views should
be outweighed
considering public health status. In this essay, I will elaborate the topic into several discussions underneath.
Nowadays, in their daily routine sedentary
people
is
not
include
their working days and leisure time for physical
activity
.
Because
they tend to
use
all their time to focus on the
important
thing related to their job, family and the other. Lacking time and facilities could be the reason to alter their mood to conduct the
sports
session.
But
the condition not will be the same if several facilities are well-fulfilled in society.
For example
, the
government
can build the
cheap
access to a park
so
the
people
could
easily
reach them.
However
, to focus on
sports
interests is not universal.
Some
people
are already adapt their lifestyle to exercise.
So
, promoting
sports
facilities would not
greatly
influence their
behaviour
.
Because
to do
sports
activity
, someone should understand how to do in proper ways.
As well
as physical
activity
, high tax penalties could
be imposed
on high-
fat
food products, tobacco and alcohol. The reason is reliance on their daily habitual, to do
so
, could decrease the consumer. This
obviously
will lead to influences statistics level on public health.
By way of conclusion, I
think
people
should
think
differently
and focus on
sports
. It
is
should
be understood
that
governments
should
also
encourage
people
from
many
aspects.
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