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Nowadays many people work from home. Some think it is beneficial, while others think it may distract the family routine. What is your opinion? v.1

Nowadays many people work from home. Some think it is beneficial, while others think it may distract the family routine. What is your opinion? v. 1
The number of people starting to work from home is increasing. There are mixed views regarding working from home as some think it is beneficial, as opposed to others wo think it can disrupt the family way of life. In this essay, I am going to give my opinion as to why I feel working from home can have its benefits as well as its downfalls. Firstly, working from home is becoming a lot more accessible to a person’s working way of life. Technology has improved significantly, therefore, when working from home it is still possible to attend weekly meetings and client presentations. This level of flexibility enables you to work through daily tasks, avoiding any interruptions that you may receive whilst working day to day in an office, for example impromptu team meetings. On the other hand, working at home is relative to an individual and how their home office is set up. Often, it can be hard for someone to forget about their working week and daily tasks, as it can be challenging to relax, due to a constant working environment. This can have a negative impact on a person’s life, causing them to feel stressed, anxious and cause arguments between the family. There is no separation of work and home life balance. To conclude, I feel working from home has its benefits, however, only if you can set up a separate workspace that can be shut off within your home. This is very important as it will allow a person to switch off and appreciate precious family time and enjoy family routine at the end of a working day and week.
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starting to work from home is increasing. There
are mixed
views regarding
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working
from home as
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some
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think
it is beneficial, as opposed to others
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think
it can disrupt the
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family
way of
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life
. In this essay, I am going to give my opinion as to why I feel
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working
from home can have its benefits
as well
as its downfalls.

Firstly
,
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working
from home is becoming a lot more accessible to a person’s
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working
way of
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life
. Technology has
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improved
significantly
,
therefore
, when
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working
from home it is
still
possible to attend weekly meetings and client presentations. This level of flexibility enables you to work through daily tasks, avoiding any interruptions that you may receive whilst
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working
day to day in an office,
for example
impromptu team meetings.

On the other hand
,
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working
at home is relative to an individual and how their home office
is set
up.
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Often
, it can be
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hard
for someone to forget about their
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working
week and daily tasks, as it can be challenging
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to relax
, due to a constant
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working
environment. This can have a
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negative
impact on a person’s
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life
, causing them to feel
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stressed
, anxious and cause arguments between the
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family
. There is no separation of work and home
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life
balance.

To conclude
, I feel
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working
from home has its benefits,
however
,
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only
if you can set up a separate workspace that can
be shut
off within your home. This is
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very
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important
as it will
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allow
a person to switch off and appreciate precious
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family
time and enjoy
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family
routine at the
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end
of a
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working
day and week.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people work from home. Some think it is beneficial, while others think it may distract the family routine. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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