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Nowadays many people working from home. Some think it is beneficial to the employee, others think it may distract the family routine. What is my opinion? v.2

Nowadays many people working from home. Some think it is beneficial to the employee, others think it may distract the family routine. What is my opinion? v. 2
All over the world, the art is considered a vital part of all cultures. With the passage of time, people are showing more interested towards science, technology and business instead art. In this essay I will discuss why people taking less interest in the arts and more driven toward business, technology and science and what steps should be taken to attract people towards the arts. While it is true that the arts enrich culture, it plays little or no role in improving our lives. For instance, one does not have to admire great paintings or marvel at brilliant sculptures for live comfortably. This does not the case with science and technology. Take, for instance, it is impossible to live without electricity. Hence, Science and technology play a crucial role in our lives. Additionally, the art is not considered a viable career option. In the arts, people have fewer job opportunity as compare to business, science and technology. So, young adults prefer to study business, science and technology rather than arts. Thus, people are more attentive towards business, science and technology instead of the arts. The art and culture coexist. Culture cannot survive without the art. This shows the importance of the arts. One way of doing this is to make arts a viable career option and also increase awareness among the people by including the arts related subjects in school. The Government should create more jobs in the arts sector and give special incentives to a masterpiece of art. In this way, children should take more interest in arts activities. For instance, in Canada, after taking proper steps towards job creation in the arts sector, the interest of people increased 20 percent in the arts. To Conclude, the most effective way to nurture arts is to capitalize on its economic potential. The Government can do this by creating jobs in this sector.
All over the world, the
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art
is considered
a vital part of all
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cultures
. With the passage of time,
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people
are showing more interested towards
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science
,
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technology
and
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business
instead
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art
. In this essay I will discuss why
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people
taking less interest in the
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arts
and more driven toward
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business
,
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technology
and
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science
and what steps should
be taken
to attract
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people
towards the arts.

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arts
enrich
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culture
, it plays
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little
or no role in improving our
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lives
.
For instance
, one does not
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have to
admire great paintings or marvel at brilliant sculptures for
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live
comfortably
. This does not the case with
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science
and
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technology
. Take,
for instance
, it is impossible to
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live
without electricity.
Hence
,
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Science
and
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technology
play a crucial role in our
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lives
.
Additionally
, the
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art
is not considered a viable career option. In the
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arts
,
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people
have fewer
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job
opportunity as compare to
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business
,
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science
and
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technology
.
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So
, young adults prefer to study
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business
,
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science
and
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technology
rather
than
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arts
.
Thus
,
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people
are more attentive towards
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business
,
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science
and
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technology
instead
of the arts.

The
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art
and
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culture
coexist.
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Culture
cannot survive without the
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art
. This
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shows
the importance of the
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arts
. One way of doing this is to
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make
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arts
a viable career option and
also
increase awareness among the
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people
by including the
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arts
related subjects in school. The
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Government
should create more
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jobs
in the
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arts
sector and give special incentives to a masterpiece of
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art
. In this way, children should take more interest in
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arts
activities.
For instance
, in Canada, after taking proper steps towards
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job
creation in the
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arts
sector, the interest of
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people
increased 20 percent in the arts.

To Conclude
, the most effective way to nurture
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arts
is to capitalize on its economic potential. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
can do this by creating
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jobs
in this sector.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people working from home. Some think it is beneficial to the employee, others think it may distract the family routine. What is my opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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