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"Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society? " v.13

"Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society? " v. 13
Recently, a growing number of individuals have spent lesser amount of time in their houses. This essay will discuss the reasons for this occurrence, which include, the sheer need to be successful in life and the problems associated with living in an overpopulated city. And, the effect it has on the society. One of the major causes of individuals spending a little amount of time at home is the constant quest for improvement in their quality of lives. This has resulted in an over-worked and overwhelmed population of folks and, has also ensured the continued growth of productive people, especially in the urban areas of the world. Another major cause is associated with a growing number of folks in the cities being prone to traffic gridlocks. As a result, these people tend to spend a great amount of quality period in traffic jams and end up, not getting to their destinations until the wee hours of the day. For example, an average Lagosian spends about five hours in traffic. This is in addition, to the statutory eight hours spent at work. A major consequence of this in the society is the continued churning out of a sad and unfulfilled population. This stems from the fact that, people tend to devote too much valuable time to work, and earning a living, thereby, ending up being unhappy; rather than enjoying valuable moments with friends and family. Also, the repercussion of constant work on the workforce is the drastic drop in the quality of health. For instance, they are always stressed, hence, susceptible to stress-related illnesses, some of which are life-threatening. A link has been established between high blood pressure and regular stress. According to the World Health Organization, two out of ten people, who are involved in strenuous activities end up becoming hypertensive before age 40. To conclude, while it is commendable that individuals strive to become great, and influential in life. The resultant effects of the stress and strains undergone during this process, impart both the individual and the society negatively and positively. It is however recommended, that proper attention should be paid to physical and mental health of individuals to prevent crackdown in the psyches of the workforce.
Recently, a growing number of
individuals
have spent lesser amount of time in their
houses
. This essay will discuss the reasons for this occurrence, which include, the sheer need to be successful in life and the problems associated with living in an overpopulated city. And, the effect it has on the society.

One of the major causes of
individuals
spending a
little
amount of time at home is the constant quest for improvement in their quality of
lives
. This has resulted in an over-worked and overwhelmed population of folks and, has
also
ensured the continued growth of productive
people
,
especially
in the urban areas of the world. Another major cause
is associated
with a growing number of folks in the cities being prone to traffic gridlocks.
As a result
, these
people
tend to spend a great amount of quality period in traffic jams and
end
up, not getting to their destinations until the wee hours of the day.
For example
, an average
Lagosian
spends about five hours in traffic. This is
in addition
, to the statutory eight hours spent at work.

A major consequence of this in the society is the continued churning out of a sad and unfulfilled population. This stems from the fact that,
people
tend to devote too much valuable time to work, and earning a living, thereby, ending up being unhappy;
rather
than enjoying valuable moments with friends and family.
Also
, the repercussion of constant work on the workforce is the drastic drop in the quality of health.
For instance
, they are always
stressed
,
hence
, susceptible to
stress
-related illnesses,
some
of which are life-threatening. A link has
been established
between high blood pressure and regular
stress
. According to the World Health Organization, two out of ten
people
, who
are involved
in strenuous activities
end
up becoming hypertensive
before
age 40.

To conclude
, while it is commendable that
individuals
strive to become great, and influential in life. The resultant effects of the
stress
and strains undergone during this process, impart both the
individual
and the society
negatively
and
positively
. It is
however
recommended, that proper attention should
be paid
to physical and mental health of
individuals
to
prevent
crackdown in the psyches of the workforce.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay "Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society? " v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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