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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. v.3

Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. v. 3
In the recent years, there has been a vast increase in the number of students going abroad to pursue their studies. While studying abroad appears to be an appealing option for many, it is argued that studying abroad does not come without a number of drawbacks. Apropos of the statement, I am in consummate accord with it. One of the advantages of studying abroad is that students will be allowed to learn to live independently as family and relatives are far away and will not be available to aid and abet them if problems arise. Thus, they will learn to settle the problems by themselves while at the same time growing as an independent individual. Furthermore, students studying abroad will be constantly exposed to a second language and hence, will be proficient in the language if given enough time. Also, it might serve as a useful ability for prospective careers in their future. However, some disadvantages that stem from studying abroad are not to be overlooked. For instance, without a grant of scholarship, students of less affluent families might deem the living cost and school fee too expensive comparing to studying in one’s local universities. Moreover, students who are not serious about pursuing their studies and are only interested in the excitement living abroad can offer them will have put in their money and invested their time ineffectively and fruitlessly. To conclude, I believe that studying abroad doesn't come without drawbacks. However, with enough effort put in and serious commitment, it will bring many benefits to individual students.
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going
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to pursue their studies. While
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studying
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abroad
appears to be an appealing option for
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many
, it
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that
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studying
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does not
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come
without a number of drawbacks. Apropos of the statement, I am in consummate accord with it.

One of the advantages of
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studying
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abroad
is that
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students
will be
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allowed
to learn to
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live
independently
as family and relatives are far away and will not be available to aid and abet them if problems arise.
Thus
, they will learn to settle the problems by themselves while at the same time growing as an independent individual.
Furthermore
,
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students
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studying
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abroad
will be
constantly
exposed to a second language and
hence
, will be proficient in the language if
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given
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enough
time.
Also
, it might serve as a useful ability for prospective careers in their future.

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,
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some
disadvantages that stem from
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studying
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abroad
are not to
be overlooked
.
For instance
, without a grant of scholarship,
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students
of less affluent families might deem the living cost and school fee too expensive comparing to
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studying
in one’s local universities.
Moreover
,
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students
who are not serious about pursuing their studies and are
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only
interested in the excitement living
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abroad
can offer them will have put in their money and invested their time
ineffectively
and
fruitlessly
.

To conclude
, I believe that
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studying
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abroad
doesn't
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come
without drawbacks.
However
, with
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enough
effort put in and serious commitment, it will bring
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many
benefits to individual
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students
.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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