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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What are the disadvantages of being self-employed? v.15

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What are the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 15
In recent times, despite the demerits of being self employed, many people would rather work for themselves than working for firms and organizations. This current trend can be attributed to the unhealthy job environment and lack of job satisfaction. To begin with, unhealthy work environment is a major reason why most people prefer working for themselves. This is because the goal of many big organizations is to make profit, and as a result, they put their workers under pressure. Therefore, employees are compelled to put up extra hours and even take their jobs, home; all these at the expense of their health and well being. In addition, Job satisfaction is a major concern for most workers. People believe that, if they toil for themselves, they can optimally utilize their skills, rather than working for companies where their abilities are grossly undermined. For example, during a survey, 90% percent of small market entrepreneurs responded that, they left their jobs and decided to start their own businesses; because, they were not given roles where they could express their abilities. These reasons explain why people would work for themselves instead of getting paid jobs. Nevertheless, being an entrepreneur is not devoid of being disadvantaged; An example, is the financial burden. For any personal business to thrive, there is a need to finance basic amenities. Such as office space, power, tax tariffs etc. Most entrepreneurs end up in financial debts due to insufficient funds; Futhermore, lack of structure could affect small business owners. Unlike Cooperate Organizations where they have structures and personnels delegated with responsibilities. Entrepreneurs are solely in charge of all decisions of the business. Therefore, if there are no goals and structures in place; such businesses are likely to go into Oblivion. In conclusion, although there are benefits of working for oneself, however, the cons, such as financial pressure and lack of a corporate structure should be considered before any individual ventures in it.
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self employed
,
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people
would
rather
work for themselves than
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working
for firms and organizations. This
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current
trend can
be attributed
to the unhealthy
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job
environment and lack of
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job
satisfaction.

To
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begin
with, unhealthy work environment is a major reason why most
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people
prefer
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working
for themselves. This is
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because
the goal of
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many
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big
organizations is to
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make
profit, and
as a result
, they put their workers under pressure.
Therefore
, employees
are compelled
to put up extra hours and even take their
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jobs
, home; all these at the expense of their health and
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well being
.
In addition
,
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Job
satisfaction is a major concern for most workers.
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People
believe that, if they toil for themselves, they can
optimally
utilize their
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skills
,
rather
than
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working
for
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companies
where their abilities are
grossly
undermined.
For example
, during a survey, 90% percent of
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small
market
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entrepreneurs
responded that, they
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left
their
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jobs
and decided to
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start
their
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own
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businesses
;
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because
, they were not
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given
roles where they could express their abilities. These reasons
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explain
why
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people
would work for themselves
instead
of getting paid jobs.

Nevertheless
, being an
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entrepreneur
is not devoid of
being disadvantaged
; An example, is the financial burden. For any personal
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business
to thrive, there is a need to finance basic amenities. Such as office space, power, tax tariffs etc. Most
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entrepreneurs
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end
up in financial debts due to insufficient funds;
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Futhermore
, lack of
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structure
could affect
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small
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business
owners. Unlike Cooperate Organizations where they have
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structures
and
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personnels
delegated with responsibilities.
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Entrepreneurs
are
solely
in charge of all decisions of the
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business
.
Therefore
, if there are no goals and
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structures
in place; such
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businesses
are likely to go into Oblivion.

In conclusion
, although there are benefits of
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working
for oneself,
however
, the cons, such as financial pressure and lack of a corporate
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structure
should
be considered
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
any individual ventures in it.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What are the disadvantages of being self-employed? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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