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Nowadays, many medical projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

Nowadays, many medical projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? v. 1
These days, a plethora of medical researches are carrying out by many individual countries. In this, majority of the projects are sponsored by the private sector or by some wealthy individuals. In my view, the experimental fund of medical should be carry by the team of the government, which can have higher number of benefits when compare with other funds. Firstly, each and every new experimental work of medical should not by conduct without the knowledge of the government. The project will have either a postive or negative result, if the latter result comes the country should also take the responsiblity of the problem, eventhough research is carried out by a individual or some group of people. To overcome this kind of problem, authority of the government can fund all types of researches for the medical development. This will lead the project workers to move in a right path without any collapse and positive result of an experiment have a good remark in the world market for the country, who successfully achieved it. Secondly, the country can have a pattern rights for the solution for any medical problem. For example, a nation achieve a solution for cancer disease have to register that we have found this solution, no one can use this solution in any country without their permission. Thus, the surrounding countries want to have medicine should pay money to the country having rights of that medicine. So, the country can earn the money what invested in that medical project. Moreover, the medicine can be freely given to the people of that nation, who introduced the solution. To conclude, the private companies cannot do the research without any drawbacks and black mark will be for both company and that country. While the medical experiment carry by the government have a proper result and level of status be increase in the world market.
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medical
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researches
are carrying out by
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many
individual
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countries
. In this, majority of the
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projects
are sponsored
by the private sector or by
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some
wealthy individuals. In my view, the experimental fund of
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medical
should be
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carry
by the team of the
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government
, which can have higher number of benefits when compare with other funds.

Firstly
, each and every new experimental work of
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medical
should not
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by
conduct without the knowledge of the
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government
. The
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project
will have either a
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postive
or
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negative
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result
, if the latter
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result
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comes
the
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country
should
also
take the
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responsiblity
of the problem,
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eventhough
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research
is carried
out by
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a
individual or
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some
group of
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people
. To overcome this kind of problem, authority of the
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government
can fund all types of
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researches
for the
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medical
development. This will lead the
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project
workers to
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move
in a right path without any collapse and
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positive
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result
of an experiment have a
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good
remark in the world market for the
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country
, who
successfully
achieved it.

Secondly
, the
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country
can have a pattern rights for the
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solution
for any
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medical
problem.
For example
, a nation achieve a
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solution
for cancer disease
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have to
register that we have found this
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solution
, no one can
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use
this
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solution
in any
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country
without their permission.
Thus
, the surrounding
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countries
want to have medicine should pay money to the
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country
having rights of that medicine.
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So
, the
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country
can earn the money what invested in that
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medical
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project
.
Moreover
, the medicine can be
freely
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given
to the
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people
of that nation, who introduced the solution.

To conclude
, the private
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companies
cannot do the
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research
without any drawbacks and black mark will be for both
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company
and that
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country
. While the
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medical
experiment carry by the
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government
have a proper
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result
and level of status be increase in the world market.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many medical projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? v. 1

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