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Creative artists should always be given freedom to express their own ideas (in words, music, pictures or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

Creative artists should always be given freedom to express their own ideas (in words, music, pictures or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. v. 1
Nowadays, artistic manifestations are more popular and common in the society. Actually, there are a lot of arts’ types, and their artists need and want to have the necessary freedom to express their feelings and concepts. I do agree that the government should not restrict whichever kind of it. The modern art needs to be accepted by the people and their governments. Firstly, This production needs to be respected. Indeed, it is an expression of somebody's opinion, feelings and thoughts. For example, I learnt that in the past, Leonardo da Vinci created Monalisa to show the world about his romantic feelings for a woman. If he was judged by the community, he would not have created this important picture. So, the artistic production can be significant even in centuries after its creation. Furthermore, it can also be a manner to express the artist’s dissatisfaction with the politics and a criticism of the behaviour, culture and the choices of the human being, the community and the government. For example, the picture of Fidel Castro, which is in most of history books, also an old image, was built to show the approval of the revolution by the population in South America and Caribbean. So, the art production is a manner to demonstrate the people’s opinion about the changes in a community and indeed it must be incentivized. To sum up, the improve of artists manifestation is a reality, and there should not be restrictions for it. All kinds of art need to be free and respected because it show someone’s vision of the life and society, government, criticism, politics, culture or behaviour.
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that in the past, Leonardo da Vinci created
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the world about his romantic feelings for a woman. If he
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, culture and the choices of the human being, the community and the
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.
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the approval of the revolution by the population in South America and Caribbean.
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art
production is a manner to demonstrate the
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people
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be incentivized
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To sum up, the
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of artists manifestation is a reality, and there should not be restrictions for it. All kinds of
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art
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need
to be free and respected
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because
it
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show
someone’s vision of the life and society,
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, criticism, politics, culture or
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Creative artists should always be given freedom to express their own ideas (in words, music, pictures or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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