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Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples? v.1

Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples? v. 1
In today's world, due to the advancement of technology getting fame is much easier than before through the web and television world. Some common person comes to the limelight through negative opinion on society or the other issues. I believe, it is a good positive sign, we get to know many hidden talents in our country with the help of internet and Television. To embark upon, when an ordinary person places an opinion about any issue, other people get offended and make him famous by defaming. Everyone's having a different opinion about one particular thing, when someone comment on any issue, it gets viral due to it questions other's belief system, that person gets trolled on the internet or in news channels eventually become famous overnight. For example, In India, ten years ago, a student who was doing her master wrote a letter to government officials about the removal of the reservation system of Indian society as job's cannot be allotted to only few caste people, this letter created an outcry in social media making her famous but in a negative way, people trolled on twitter for many days. This affected her personal life a lot. However, there are some positive sides of this internet and television. These are the only platform to show unique skills to the whole world. There are so many common people made their career by displaying their unique talent on social media and through television shows. For example, Famous singer Amala Paul got overnight fame through one of the singing reality show and now she is the most popular singer in India. In conclusion, with the help of media and on web, common person get famous for the wrong reason which can ruin their life. But I believe, at the same time, there are many ordinary people who made their mark in this society by their hidden talent.
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the web and television world.
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person
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to the limelight
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negative
opinion on society or the other issues. I believe, it is a
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good
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positive
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sign
, we
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to know
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many
hidden talents in our country with the
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help
of internet and Television.

To embark upon, when an ordinary
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person
places an opinion about any issue, other
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people
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get
offended and
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make
him
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famous
by defaming. Everyone's having a
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different
opinion about one particular thing, when someone
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comment
on any issue, it
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gets
viral due to it questions other's belief system, that
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person
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gets
trolled on the internet or in news channels
eventually
become
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famous
overnight.
For example
, In India, ten years ago, a student who was doing her master wrote a letter to
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government
officials about the removal of the reservation system of Indian society as job's cannot
be allotted
to
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only
few caste
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people
, this letter created an outcry in social media making her
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famous
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but
in a
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negative
way,
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people
trolled on twitter for
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days. This
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affected
her personal life a lot.
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, there are
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some
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positive
sides of this internet and television. These are the
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platform to
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unique
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skills
to the whole world. There are
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many
common
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people
made their career by displaying their unique talent on social media and
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through
television
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shows
.
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singer
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Amala
Paul
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overnight fame
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one of the singing reality
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show
and
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now
she is the most popular singer in India.

In conclusion
, with the
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of media and on web, common
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person
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get
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famous
for the
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wrong
reason which can ruin their life.
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But
I believe, at the same time, there are
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ordinary
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people
who made their mark in this society by their hidden talent.
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Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples? v. 1

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