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6. A. The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

6. A. The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. v. 1
Since the invention of modern media, news feeds have become an increasingly invasive force in the lives of all human beings. However, it is disagreed that the development of news media is negative. This will be shown by looking at how news media encourages both awareness and transparency within the world. Firstly, modern media sources have made great inroads in the spreading of knowledge around the word. For example, the Internet allowed (and continues to allow) the world to witness the uprisings of the Arab Spring. Social media here act as a driving force behind this revolution. Had these images not been made available to a scrutinizing global audience, it was possible that the entire phenomenon could have cost many more lives than it did. As this example shows, modern news media allows the human families to keep watch of each other and provide aid if it is needed. In addition to this, news media sources have put an immense effort to investigate and publish news regarding corruption in different sectors that helps to tackle corruption and ensure transparency and accountability the world over. Take the tragic high-speed train crash in China as an example. Despite trying to quickly bury the carriages involved, the Chinese government was forced by the media to admit that serious corruption problems had plagued the project from the beginning. The healthy dialogues that the media coverage of this unfortunate event sparked will hopefully continue to encourage integrity within the Chinese government. It is for reasons such as this that news media should be thought of as a positive entity in the world. To conclude, after looking at how news media helps to develop awareness and transparency, its benefits can clearly be seen. It is hoped free press will continue to grow with the help of technology and modern tools.
Since the invention of
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,
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feeds have become an
increasingly
invasive force in the
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lives
of all human beings.
However
, it
is disagreed
that the development of
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news
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media
is
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negative
. This will
be shown
by looking at how
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news
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media
encourages both awareness and transparency within the world.

Firstly
,
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modern
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media
sources have made great inroads in the spreading of knowledge around the word.
For example
, the Internet
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allowed
(and continues to
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allow
) the world to witness the uprisings of the Arab Spring. Social
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media
here act as a driving force behind this revolution. Had these images not
been made
available to a scrutinizing global audience, it was possible that the entire phenomenon could have cost
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many
more
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lives
than it did. As this example
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shows
,
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modern
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news
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media
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allows
the human families to
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keep
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watch
of each other and provide aid if it
is needed
.

In addition
to this,
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news
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sources have put an immense effort to investigate and publish
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news
regarding corruption in
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different
sectors that
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helps
to tackle corruption and ensure transparency and accountability the world over. Take the tragic high-speed train crash in China as an example. Despite trying to
quickly
bury the carriages involved, the Chinese
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government
was forced
by the
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media
to admit that serious corruption problems had plagued the project from the beginning. The healthy dialogues that the
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media
coverage of this unfortunate
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event
sparked will
hopefully
continue to encourage integrity within the Chinese
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government
. It is for reasons such as this that
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news
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media
should be
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thought
of as a
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positive
entity in the world.

To conclude
, after looking at how
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news
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media
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to develop awareness and transparency, its benefits can
clearly
be
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seen
. It
is hoped
free press will continue to grow with the
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help
of technology and
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modern
tools.
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IELTS essay 6. A. The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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