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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.8

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 8
Currently, with globalized world, global tourism becomes more and more popular trend. People have tendency to spend more time getting away from the noisy of their city and chilling out at other places. Some people argue that the growth of international tourism emerges conflicts between local residents and foreign tourists instead of absorbing different cultures. I partly agree with this view. To begin with, it is clearly seen that global traveling creates pressure between people from distinct areas. First and foremost, debates derived from the difference in language. For example, that international travellers do not have good command of foreign language which is spoken in destinations make them have trouble on understanding or expressing their ideas or feelings. As a result, tourists and local habitants can misunderstand each other and conflicts will be happened. In addition, the diversity of foreign tourists influences adversely on local culture. Due to the fact that international travelers have some words or manners which are not suitable for cultural local, their behaviors will impact or even bother residents. On the other hand, the effects of international tourism are not all negative. Firstly, some tourists live in harmony with residents and fall in love places where they visit. Travelers keen on seeing beautiful views and talking with friendly habitants. Some of them even make a decision to go abroad and reside destinations since they find these places as a suitable lifestyle. Moreover, several tourists have a thirsty for understanding and accessing the world of culture. For instance, a lot of travelers spend more time finding and researching information of culture before they go sightseeing the country. In conclusion, although worldwide tourism creates tension between people from different cultures, it is undeniable that a boost to tourism not only provide a range of opportunities to know about other customs, language, history but also enhance global residents to learn and experience other tradition of one nation many realities.
Currently
, with globalized world, global
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tourism
becomes more and more popular trend.
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People
have tendency to spend more time getting away from
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the noisy of
their city and chilling out at
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other
places.
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Some
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people
argue that the growth of
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international
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tourism
emerges conflicts between
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local
residents and foreign
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tourists
instead
of absorbing
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different
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cultures
. I partly
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agree
with this view.

To
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begin
with, it is
clearly
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seen
that global traveling creates pressure between
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people
from distinct areas.
First
and foremost, debates derived from the difference in language.
For example
, that
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international
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travellers
do not have
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good
command of foreign language which
is spoken
in destinations
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make
them have trouble on understanding or expressing their
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ideas
or feelings.
As a result
,
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tourists
and
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local
habitants can misunderstand each
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other
and conflicts will
be happened
.
In addition
, the diversity of foreign
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tourists
influences
adversely
on
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local
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culture
. Due to the fact that
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international
travelers have
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some
words or manners which are not suitable for cultural
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local
, their behaviors will impact or even bother residents.

On the
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other
hand, the effects of
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international
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tourism
are not all
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negative
.
Firstly
,
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some
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tourists
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live
in harmony with residents and fall in
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love
places where they visit. Travelers keen on seeing
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beautiful
views and talking with friendly habitants.
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Some
of them even
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make
a decision to go abroad and reside destinations since they find these places as a suitable lifestyle.
Moreover
, several
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tourists
have a thirsty for understanding and accessing the world of
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culture
.
For instance
,
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a lot of
travelers spend more time finding and researching information of
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culture
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before
they go sightseeing the country.

In conclusion
, although worldwide
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tourism
creates tension between
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people
from
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different
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cultures
, it is undeniable that a boost to
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tourism
not
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only
provide a range of opportunities to know about
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other
customs, language, history
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but
also
enhance global residents to learn and experience
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other
tradition of one nation
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many
realities.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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